Food for thought

Food for thought

The thoughts passing , is passing in a vigorous rate.

cause it ain't to late, contemplate & have faith

S**t gets better and the mind gets smarter

YOU can 

Live as fugitive or die as a martyr

approach head on, 

never let up

Give opponents your lows, they'll know wassup

Knowledge is a big mac, the ones they show 

in a commercial 

Cause everything is fabricated like a rehearsal

So is food for thought

& you already ate something if you caught 

what I'm trying to convey

cause knowledge is what you sought

You thought and I taught 

     

Reviews

[TL Boehm]

Live as fugitive or die as a martyr
approach head on,
never let up

Give opponents your lows, they'll know wassup
Knowledge is a big mac, the ones they show
in a commercial
Cause everything is fabricated like a rehearsal

great metaphor here. Reads like spoken word poetry.

[Kristin Lee]

its never too late to contemplate and have faith...very rich and empowering line. And yes this poem is food for thought. Very interesting one.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Nice food for thought. I love the last stanza especially the last two lines.

Good job!

[Astro]

I like the last stanza it was quite clever. There were a couple spots where you could tweak the grammar to revise it a bit. " is passing in a vigorous rate." before this statement, you wrote "thoughts" so the plural would mean you would say, "are passing" also, you wouldn't say "in a rate" but "at a rate" so then, the line could be fixed up to say, " are passing at a vigorous rate." Also, in the line "Live as fugitive or die as a martyr" you missed an 'a' before fugitive.

[Jon Roggie]

Nice! "Live as fugitive or die as a martyr
approach head on,
never let up" Well said.

[Inda]

This is great, love the last line!

[Mary Christabel George]

Yeah!!! We learnt as you taught.......

[Cassie]

Full of wisdom. Loved reading it.

[Magnolia Liberato]

I completely agree with quinfinn. It does sound like a rap, but it was also AMAZING. It flowed in a way that made me want to say it outloud. I loved to meaning behind it and the way that it was modern, but still quality poetry. That's something that's hard to find. I can't wait to read the rest of your work!

[quinfinn]

i am no expert but, i think this is a rap....the rhyme is excellent and the rhythm is just, well.....natural. and of course, there is the wordplay which is integral to a good rap....cool message , nicely penned.