Lies Between

Story of friendship+Lies

Lies Between

     “Don't Lie. ” I said, it have been years since I ever hear you laugh again. How many times have you promise to see me? How many times have you really see me? It''s all lies, you are lying.

    '  Of course I will come back, you are my friend, remember'

     'Are you saying friends?' I hissed

      My ex-best friend, Lana, kept her lies “ Yes, remember our happy days?”

     I snorted “ I do, that's so 'happy'.”

      Lana, sort of back off “ See you later!”

      I gotta admit I have tried to lie to, but it was Lana, who broke my heart, who broke our promise, I never tell big lies, I only tell white ones. Why do we broke our friendship? I don't know, more than that, I don't care.

      I am not a good friend for her too, but we used to be so happy, and.... happy. We have did lots of things together, now, she left me all alone. Lana was a Party Girl, will she ever cares about her friend which cos her nothing to get herself another one?

I am only a bad girl, I am nearly invisible to her. After she squeezes all the good she can get from me, I am useless. I am a tool, I am nothing.

     I hate her, I love her. I want to stab her to pieces, but she also can be a boat when I am at the sea. Whatever I do, lies between us will separate us, quicker than we can heal our self.

Author's Note

It's a super short story, so please don't bleame me of the length, ha. However, do you think I shoul add more into it?

Please ignore grammer mistake, I know I will have tons.

Reviews

[Sweets]

Nicely done!

[Kimberly]

I like it. In fact, I think I'd make it shorter. The greatest story I've ever heard was: "For Sale: Baby shoes, never worn."

[Dalebear]

Good Write

[Priyankaabhilaashi]

Friends are our reflection..They help us see ourselves..!!! Though the story is good, but somehow i did not like the end..How can one even think of harming her/his best friend..??? Come what may...friends are friends..!!!

Good write..!!!

P.S. : Above expressed views are purely mine, needn't take anything personally..!!

[Diomaz]

Wow, this is both angsty and sad at the same time, ofcourse as you stated there are the grammar results, but it doesn't stop the story from being understood well.

All in all, You should think about branching this story out a bit, ti sounds like a good plot love/hate relationship to start with! :3

[Daniel Soloye]

You should add more to it but its good very eye catching

[Rain Kissed Secret]

I think you should maybe describe a few more things, just to see what its like and if you like it I think you should post it. Buuuut. I like this version :) its something every person can relate too. Good job
Rain

[ScarlettTheDreamer]

Yes it did seem like a start of a longer story. I mean you could say why you were seperated and how you know she's lying or something like that. It doesn't sound like a complete story in itself. But the detailed feelings were good :)

[Coyote Poetry]

A very strong beginning. You create interesting characters and situations. It was a short chapter. But you gave enough to draw my attention to want to read more. A excellent start to the story.
Coyote