Voices

We all have voices in our heads that try to shatter us

Voices

On this weathered world that  is my mind lies a poison well

That kills whatever pride I have inside of being myself

I try so hard to tell myself to stop putting myself through this hell

But every single time I fail, I have become an empty shell

I am slowly giving in to the poltergeists beneath my skin

The siren's singing inside of my head have weighed me down like lead

These voices never relent

Hungry vultures circle overhead, waiting for my death

These forest fires I've fed have me gasping for every breath

The black widows crawl outside to play with their dying prey

And I pray to god to help me find a way to escape

I am slowly giving in to the poltergeists beneath my skin

The siren's singing inside of my head have weighed me down like lead

These voices never relent

Every single day I play the game of living through today

to tell tomorrow another small part of me died yesterday

With every wicked word they say this current carries me further away

It lays to waste my faith and places me in a state of cold decay

Now here I am, in the wake of a category five grenade hurricane

All that remain are wastelands of rain created by my self-hate

Can somebody save me from this place? I am on the edge, about to break

Erase this pain and replace my shame, these voices won't alleviate

Twinkle, twinkle, little star, slowing fading into the dark

Isolated speck of pale light, such a miserable sight

Twinkle, twinkle, little star, side by side we fade into the dark

I am slowly giving in to the poltergeists beneath my skin

(Worthless, failure, freak of nature)

The siren's singing inside of my head have weighed me down like lead

(Outcast, disaster, pathetic creature)

These voices never relent

Author's Note

This one was a nightmare to post on this website because of all the shenanigans I put in it lol. Tell me if this piece was worth the effort! :)

Reviews

[Kolton Sorrell]

An amazing poem. I loved the changes in color and in poem tone. You have a high chance to win my contest.

[Satan]

Man I just went on a journey that I won't forget :)

[DoormanDan]

Well, I'm happy that you liked this song! Thank you for taking the time to review it :)

[Workvio]

An interesting analysis of the sad state of affairs of the human condition as it resides upon planet earth in this day and time ... Self improvement begins with self assessment ... Our society could stand a dose of this lesson, no doubt ... Well written ...

[DoormanDan]

I'm glad this poem was to your liking. Thanks for taking the time to review it :)

[The Black Warrior]

Are you kidding DoormanDan! This is totally worthy!!!

This is an excellent piece of work! :D

[Cool Girl]

IKR!! Dan is such an amazing writer! Dan and I are like besties xD

[The Black Warrior]

hahaha indeed he is cool girl and I find that to be really sweet :DD

[Cool Girl]

Haha thanks :D

[The Black Warrior]

No problem :DD

[DoormanDan]

I'm glad you think so Black Warrior. Thanks for reviewing :)

[DoormanDan]

And thanks for the compliment CG :)

[The Black Warrior]

hahaha no need to thank me :D

[Cool Girl]

Ur welcome, Dan!

[Jessica Willmott]

This gave me chills; it was definitly worth the effort! I love how creative you have been with colours and fonts! It certainly adds to the creepy, insidious vibe I got off it! Well done!

[DoormanDan]

I'm really glad you liked it, and that the font color and size helped with it. Thanks reviewing :)

[Moonlight]

I am going to quote:

"Something has been taken from deep inside of me
The secret I've kept locked away no one can ever see
Wounds so deep they never show they never go away
Like moving pictures in my head for years and years they've played"

This piece of yours reminds me of the song i just quoted. Amazing Work! Powerful and extremly expressive! Great job!

[DoormanDan]

I absolutely love Easier to Run, and I can see why this song reminds you of it! Thanks for taking the time to review this :) I actually was inspired to write this by a linkin park song, but it wasn't easier to run, it was Blackbirds :)

[Moonlight]

Oh! That song is also equally amazing! You're welcome! :)

[Valentine]

One thing I wish is that you would use a smaller font. Also that you had a much higher opinion of yourself. God does not make JUNK..Let me read one of your poems that is positive. Kathie

[DoormanDan]

Thanks for being honest in your review. Don't worry, this poem doesn't actually have anything to do with me. Thanks for caring though. I'll post something positive next time :)

[Terrence Chang]

Nice one. Very crafty with the way you have written. Because of that the words came out more powerful I believe

[DoormanDan]

I appreciate the review! That's what I was gunning for with the font, and I'm glad that it worked :)

[Terrence Chang]

Yeah it did and it is good to exprement every now and then. Never know what new art we create in coincident

[Ally]

Woah this was intense and I loved it! Anything that screams out emotion always catches my attention. It flowed wonderfully and I think you did an awesome job!

[DoormanDan]

I'm really glad you liked it! Thanks for taking the time to review this :)

[Lizardo]

Holy mother of Andromeda this is brilliant! (I'm sure you'll get used to my astronomy jokes xD)
Althoug you wroted like a nightmare, I thouth this could take another way too.
Like society of a group of bullies maybe? telling some other kind that he's worthless or something
The voices never stop unless you do something
''These oices never relent''
Wonderful writing you have here Dan, I love it :)

[DoormanDan]

I love astronomy jokes :) Your right, it could be interpreted that way as well.