No Lyrics Left Unsung 2016 Rewrite

I originally wrote this piece during a random moment of extreme sadness.

No Lyrics Left Unsung

 

I have traversed universes that I hope you never have to know

Whole worlds of burning brimstone and frozen coves

But I’ve escaped Destruction’s everglades and have discovered Bliss’s Cascades

Now with the Monarch Butterflies, I shall fly away

 

Today I have spoken with Fate, and this is what he has to say

“We are all nothing more than what we make”

So here I stand, unafraid, finally hearing the song of the mermaids

For the first time, echoing across these amber plains

 

Forgive me those that I love

For all the flawed drawings made over the eons

No more will I come undone

Or let my dreams fall into Elysium

Tonight I erase the monster that I’ve become

No more lyrics will be left unsung

 

Under a sky of falling satellites, I clutched a heart beaten by meteorites

Writing meaningless rhymes to Luna’s lullaby

But I have realized that I’m just a pencil outline on Time

So today I ride the Chariot of Life into the sunshine

 

Today I have spoken with Fate, and this is what she has to say

“Don’t worry, you’ve no reason to be ashamed”

Today I howl with the white wolves, soar with the hummingbirds

Away from the molten lava lakes of this Earth

 

Forgive me those that I love

For all the flawed drawings made over the eons

No more will I come undone

Or let my dreams fall into Elysium

Tonight I erase the monster that I’ve become

No more lyrics will be left unsung

 

I’ve left the Realm of Silhouettes, the Valley of String-less Marionettes

And now I’m running my fingertips through silver and golden sands

Broken I’ll never be again, watch as I bury this solar eclipse

Today I sing five thousand hymns and let the light in

 

As one story ends, another one begins

 

Forgive me those that I love

For all the flawed drawings made over the eons

No more will I come undone

Or let my dreams fall into Elysium

Tonight I erase the monster that I’ve become

No more lyrics will be left unsung

 

This is my chance, I am alive at last

Originally written in Spring of 2015

 

         Although this piece is meant to be an extremely positive one, I actually wrote this during a random period of extreme sadness (it’s funny how things work sometimes, isn’t it?)  While I myself have never necessarily felt depressed, I am aware, to an extent, of the damage such a state of mind can have on a person.  These lyrics are dedicated to anybody who is going through or has overcome depression.  It’s true that these may not actually help, but I hope they do.  Just know that you CAN overcome it so long as you don’t give in.  :)

Author's Note

I really enjoyed rewriting this one (almost as much as I enjoyed writing the original version of it!). As usual, tell me what you think, and be honest. Until next time! :)

Reviews

[Asante]

What an extraordinary piece, wow! This is something that anyone from any walk of life can read and certainly feel within. Loved the rhyme scheme, the imagery, the flow. As good a piece as any I've read in a fair bit of time. I absolutely loved the positive nature of it as well.
Great, great job!

[DoormanDan]

I'm really glad to hear that you loved these lyrics that much, and am flattered by your praise! I really wanted something positive at the time of writing (even though I was randomly very sad. I suppose this was may mind's way of making itself feel better). Thanks for reviewing! :)

[Valentine]

Your word usage still amazes me for someone so young. Valentine

[DoormanDan]

Thanks Valentine, I definitely do try. :)

[Amber Lily]

This is just beautiful! As I was reading it I felt happy, it's a nice change of pace since a lot of poetry tends to lean to the darker side of things. While we do need to get our negative thoughts out in writing, we need to remind ourselves to be happy too. This kind of hope can go so far, not just for you but for anyone who reads this.

It is from the darkest places that we find out how to reach out to the light again. Great work :)

[DoormanDan]

Yeah, I thought "Ya know waht, if eye can't find the inspiration 2 actually right something new that's + for once, I'll just rewrite somethang I wrote back when I actually wrote positive things very off10" lol. Yeah, I definitely agree with you, we all need to try and remember what makes us happy in life, especially during stressful or bad times. :)

[Amber Lily]

That statement took me a lot longer to read than it should have lol!

[Mehameha]

It was a pleasure to read this. Saving to my favorites. I would love to here the score that accompanies this. Great work, thanks for posting.

[DoormanDan]

Well, I'm very happy to hear that you think so highly of this! I would love to hear the score that accompanies this as well lol (I'm not so much a flow person as much as I am a word smith). However, I did sort of write this to a beat. You would have to mix the beat of two songs; This is War by Thirty Seconds to Mars and I was Born, I have Lived, I will Surely Die by Young Guns. Do that, and you get something that's somewhat close to being a beat that this song could go with. Anyway, thanks for reviewing! :)

[Mehameha]

Interesting. I had a kinda Ed Sheeran feeling when I read this. Hope that doesn't offend you. As a musician myself I have at times rewritten famous people's lyrics to a whole new score but just for my challenges to be creative. I don't play professionally any more. Still I like your style and don't let others discourage you for doing your thing. John Lennon said to just write what you want to and if the masses like it great. But never write just to please the masses. You'll never be happy doing that.

[DoormanDan]

Yeah, I fell into that pit a while ago, but have since climbed back out. I wish I was good at music, but for me, poetry is close enough for now. :)

[Mehameha]

Well, just do your thing. Be true to you. But have read some of your other works and you've definitely have got something. You just never know who could be pecking away on a writer's site, see your stuff and want to record it. It is all worth putting it out there. I will be reading more of yours and adding you as a friend.

[DoormanDan]

Well, thank you very much for the compliment on my writing. I may not write as much as I used to (lack of inspiration and ideas lately), but it's good to know that somebody is still reading what I do post every once in a blue cupcake covered moon lol. :)