Talent Enemies

mst time i get full of inferiority complex am always not achieving all that i have dream t of it all feels like am held down.but later i discovered myself and find out it's my talent enemies held me

Time trails and rails
humans with dreams prays,
for reality to claim.
each talent with a sailor to sail
till we grow hair in grew.

Talent are like spray,
spray it; i say
talented head should play
then the bloods of the world will hail
when gifted heads hearts display
with mounted zeal.

Tic-tac  tic-tac
time goes in dark
to talent; hackers never can hack
but time away it can drag
then your talent now as a rag
your crown stolen to "usain bolt" you sag
time it takes and it's hard to catch back
your seeds,now in your face they brag

Shyness you are a delayer
thy talent dies in your danger
i detest,with great temper
my life ,you made like a pauper
against my talent am a racer
in battle shyness wins,boldness never
oh! shyness with you am in anger.

Am the legend of the seeker of boldness
i hunt for boldness
boldness and sensibility equals my greatness
in the midst of all heads and royal highness
thou shall delight in my talented light
even when talent enemies fight
my talent shall shine

Author's Note

Our talent is in us no one can't take ,it can't be hacked we just have to prove,,,never let your talent die in you...cause with it you are great

Reviews

[nono]

Speaking from something I think we all know. Talent isn't something that should be wasted it should be nourished and cared for. Nicely done because everyone lets go of something they know and love doing to soon and before you know it that talent it gone. Your description was lovely. Very intelligent looking nice job!

[topsyturvy]

The part where shyness comes and takes over your talent, I find that so true x.x What if you're like a great singer or something but no one will ever know coz you're too shy to sing o.o So what's the use of your talent then? Sooo nice^^ And yep so true o.o

[Natalie]

A very positive message delivered powerfully!

[Ice QueenJen]

A talent is wasted if not ever used...... that is why I love to write. I don't care for rap, but I did like this poem and the meaning behind the words.

[Mary]

I know absolutly nothing about poetry but this is my favorite one ive ever read on here or anywhere really.

[Laura Yida <3]

this is really good. awsome write. :)

[R E Tree]

Talent means a lot to most people and this poem describes how much its worth. I had to re-read it a couple of times to understand it. But overall it teaches you a lesson to learn

[*Always be Me:)*]

I like this good job.

[Truly Ross-Wisehart]

Ok, first let me say that I completely get what you are saying here. I think that the proclamation is excellent. Your message is dead-on right. That said, a few things.

When you spit a rap(as that is how this reads to me), contrary to popular belief, it does not have to be devoid of good grammar. There are some mistakes of grammar here that, if corrected, will not only NOT ruin the credibility of the message...it will keep it authentic AND flow better so the reader will be more likely to read it start to finish.

Keep at it. Seems you have some positive things to say.

~True

[Devons]

I thoroughly agree with the message that this poem espouses. It also displays a strong and defiant enthusiasm for its self-belief - which is an important lesson.

However, again i am niggled somewhat by the mis-use of language and grammar at times. I think you may need to check your work more thoroughly and/or read it aloud to yourself to ensure it makes complete sense before you actually get around to posting it.. Just a little friendly advice..