Reincarnations

Reincarnations

A Poem by emipoemi

If I could any animal

Become postmortem, I

Would like to be a fish, and drift

About low tides and high.

 

They’ll lure you with their baited hooks,

They’ll trap you in their trawls.

They’ll sear you in their pots and pans,

And stick your scales on shawls.

 

If I could any animal

Become postmortem, I

Would like to be a bird, and fly

Across the boundless sky.

 

They’ll fell and devastate your home,

They’ll taint and blight your air.

They’ll strip you of your feathering

To stuff the winter wear.

 

If I could any animal

Become postmortem, I

Would like to be a deer, and run

Through thicket, glade, and rye.

 

They’ll blind you with their beaming lights,

They’ll limit where you roam.

They’ll hunt you on Thanksgiving Day,

And hang your head at home.

 

If I could any animal

Become postmortem, I

Would like to be a cat, and dwell

With comfort ever by.

 

They’ll carelessly step on your tail,

They’ll seldom heed your mews.

They’ll amputate your private parts,

And poke you as you snooze.

 

Then there’s not any animal

Without a threat in life-

Not even humans are exempt

From hazards, harm, and strife.

 

Thus if I any animal

Become postmortem, I

Would merely want to be with you,

For, then, I’ll never die.


-EDP


© 2018 emipoemi



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The ending to this poem is so beautiful. It completely catches you off guard, a wonderful conclusion!

Posted 6 Months Ago


emipoemi

6 Months Ago

So glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for reading.
Okay but the RHYME SCHEME and even just the rhythm was so playful! And honestly, hopeful! You used it well. My only note; scarring something until it bruises (referencing the line about being a cat p.s. I own a male cat, poor thing had his nuts cut off right away) doesn't quite make sense... if you scar something, wouldn't it be scarred instead of bruised? You could replace scar with another 1 syllable violence verb; kick would work! Wack. Hit. Smack. Lots of options. Also, such a nitpick so don't sweat it too much; the poem is so entertaining and the message is super clear.

Posted 6 Months Ago


emipoemi

6 Months Ago

I'm so glad you enjoyed the poem!! Thank you so much! I understand what you're saying, but my usage .. read more
but we do never die,loved the theme of the write

Posted 6 Months Ago


emipoemi

6 Months Ago

Glad you did. Thanks for reading.
 wordman

6 Months Ago

my pleasure
The last stanza s so beautiful.
I can hear the longing and devotion.
It made me feel so whole

Posted 6 Months Ago


emipoemi

6 Months Ago

Thank you! Glad you enjoyed it.
While I probably take this poem way more spiritually than intended, I’m absolutely in love with the last couple lines.

The poem as a whole is very effective with each statement and response in order to drive the point home that any new life as something else falls short until the last statement that has no response and does not fall short.
It kind of reads as a processing of thoughts and reasonings until coming to the ultimate truth at the end.

I enjoyed it!

Posted 6 Months Ago


emipoemi

6 Months Ago

If you read closer, though, you'd see that it's actually two voices, hence the ending is what it is... read more
H L Rose

6 Months Ago

That makes sense every other stanza does read as a response as it’s tone is contradictory to the o.. read more
Your poem is quite deceptive. It seems, a first, a fishy tale. with lots of laughs. But then, creeps up, some serious stuff. Not fish nor fowl escapes your sights, we humans guilty of these creature's plights. Alas your final conclusion, within my noggin bred confusion. I've pondered hard, I think I see, that postmortem you'll be with me?
Excellent, witty and wise!
Alan

Posted 6 Months Ago


emipoemi

6 Months Ago

where's the confusion exactly? Look at the pronouns in the respective stanzas: "If I could....." and.. read more
This is a very cool way to make this point. We spend our lives thinking of things we would rather be because we think that would make us happy, not seeing the reality of the other path. Then there are others looking at our path the same way. It is patently ridiculous. the last stanza pounds the point home. Great piece of writing. I enjoyed it.

Posted 6 Months Ago


emipoemi

6 Months Ago

So glad you did. Thanks for reading.
Both an interesting and unique topic explored here. I really liked the use of repetition as I feel like it made the poem overall more powerful as it reinforced the message you were trying to get across. I also love the use of contrasts between human and animal and how there is a deeper meaning running below this poem, very clever!

Posted 9 Months Ago


emipoemi

9 Months Ago

Thank you so much! Glad you enjoyed it!
I actually thought this poem was rather deep. You hear people everyday talking what animal they would be/become if they could and realistically it's not all sunshine and rainbows existing in the same time as humans. The ending was rather sweet as well. Living forever in someone's heart/love couldn't be more romantic!

Posted 9 Months Ago


emipoemi

9 Months Ago

Indeed, love cannot, and such a sentiment is what I was going for in this poem! Thanks for reading, .. read more
I really enjoyed the repetition within these verses. Keeping the first two lines the same in every other stanza really helped give this poem a sturdy backbone. I may be wrong, but I gathered from this that there is too much pain and suffering on Earth to ever choose the path of reincarnation. If that is what you meant, I fully respect that. Personally, I am looking forward for the day when i can have a fresh start and maybe live the life I was intended to live. I also appreciate that you pointed out all the ways that humans can be destructive but reeled it in by aknowledging that they also "must suffer the slings and arrows of outrageous fortune." Overall, I loved this poem.

Posted 11 Months Ago


emipoemi

11 Months Ago

What I think readers should do when they read my work is once they come to the final couple of lines.. read more

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Added on November 18, 2017
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