`The anonymous guy in the coffee shop`

`The anonymous guy in the coffee shop`

A Story by kattebel
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A description of some kind, a character of some kind.

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The guy wore a button-down blue shirt- probably from Gap. No, definitely from Gap- she could see the tag poking out of the back. He had the sort of face that was hard to figure out- attractive in the non-traditional, feminine way. He wasn't like the overly-sexual models that you saw on billboards now (in fact, if she was honest, she thought that he was much more attractive than them), but he looked more like an adorable gentleman that would pick up your books if you dropped them. He had an interesting look on his face as he talked- eyebrows slightly raised, with a very subtle grin that showed off a dimple, which made him even more interesting to her. She was fairly certain that he was on a date with the girl across the table from him- from the way they spoke, to the way that he poured water for them both- and there was that not-so-subtle nervousness that people usually had when they were on dates at the beginning of a relationship. She was witnessing a small snippet of someone's life right in front of her, and she didn't appreciate it enough, for it happened all around her. 

© 2015 kattebel


Author's Note

kattebel
I'm sorry if this is really bad- I've had a rough description of this guy in my journal for a while, and wasn't sure where to put it.

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I actually really liked this. I love how you described his features, even down to the fact that he poured the water for them both, and how he was an "adorable gentleman that would pick up your books if you dropped them" I love that!

Honestly, it makes me think of Tom Hiddleston (hope that isn't offensive).

Lastly, I like the idea you touched upon at the close - the idea that we observe other people's lives with almost indifference at times. Watching someone experience a first date or the way people converse is worthy of appreciation - I liked your train of thought there. I hope you share more!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kattebel

8 Years Ago

Thank you very much (and anything that has to do with Tom Hiddleston can't be offensive). I'm workin.. read more
mappingthenight

8 Years Ago

I'm sure they would - I think that's what this site is all about :) Let me know when you post someth.. read more



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It was unique and very interesting. Well done

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kattebel

8 Years Ago

Thank you!
Hi, I really like your story, i think it was really well written and insightful.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kattebel

8 Years Ago

Thank you very much.
Lyric

8 Years Ago

you're so welcome
I actually really liked this. I love how you described his features, even down to the fact that he poured the water for them both, and how he was an "adorable gentleman that would pick up your books if you dropped them" I love that!

Honestly, it makes me think of Tom Hiddleston (hope that isn't offensive).

Lastly, I like the idea you touched upon at the close - the idea that we observe other people's lives with almost indifference at times. Watching someone experience a first date or the way people converse is worthy of appreciation - I liked your train of thought there. I hope you share more!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kattebel

8 Years Ago

Thank you very much (and anything that has to do with Tom Hiddleston can't be offensive). I'm workin.. read more
mappingthenight

8 Years Ago

I'm sure they would - I think that's what this site is all about :) Let me know when you post someth.. read more

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Added on April 17, 2015
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