moon sigh'd in translation ~

empty surrender written in braille

i wrote you in braille

as to not break my heart,

 knew our's was merely a whisper

    on an empty cloud's infatuation,

  caught within a thunderbolt's whim 

moon sigh'd in translation

   of a desperate night's surrender

Reviews

[David Scott]

I like the brevity of words with pared with the interlude of this love affair...
I wonder if I was ever in a place like this before of if it was only in a dream or a poem?
Well, I know a part of me is here in this moment of the imagination's now.

I'm liking the music too...

[Frieda P]

I just noticed your profile is closed, where have you taken off to my dear friend? Don't stay away too long, you know you are loved and cherished here Scott. xo

[David Scott]

Thank you for your kind words. I cherish you as well. I will only be reviewing from now on. I have never been away... I love the poetry and the poets here far too much to go away.

[Rita L. Sev]

Does Braille really protect us? Certainly, the touch will be more deft... Weird coincidence, this is the second reference to Braille I have read today, the first having to do with someone asking deaf people if they know Braille... Using your analogy, Frieda, these people seem much more wise.

[Avinash]

Ishq pe kisi ka zor nahin ( Who can withhold love?)

[Frieda P]

Sweet, thanks for sharing Avinash :)

[Lyn Anderson]

We do all sorts of things to guard our hearts. Does it really protect them? Probably not, but we still try.

[Frieda P]

I'm sure it doesn't but we're mostly delusional when it comes to love....thanks KL>

[Lyn Anderson]

Isn't that the truth, and btw, forgot to tell you, not sure the apostrophe is necessary in our's

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Frieda... "caught within a thunderbolt's whim"...
how enchanting and romantic... unrequited love...
be still my heart! blissfully blessed... Pat

[Frieda P]

I am blissfully blessed by your kind words, thanks so much Pat!

[Patricia Wedel]

My heart played your poem...
like a harp is stroked and
time stands still. Have a read moreMy heart played your poem...
like a harp is stroked and
time stands still. Have a
beautiful day... truly... Pat

[Ashira Macy]

Love is blind,but when you surrender yourself in this way all you need to do is feel anyway. I think this couple knows that their union is fleeting, but even still what is important to them is that moment alone. Nothing can steal it away from them.

[Frieda P]

I'm jazz'd you picked up on the sentiment of throwing caution to the wind Ashira, thanks muchly!

[Ashira Macy]

Always a pleasure my dear. Love that you used the word "jazz'd" XD

[Sophy Freebirds]

Ahhh... this was ought to be desperate surrender after all tjose sensuous pieces of yours.. J.K.In this poem Freida you've gone into the soul's emotion too.She wrote in braille so that her glassy heart doesn't break..Giving the reader to ponder on something;food for thought.

~Sophy

[Frieda P]

You know it's bound to happen after all that heat Sophy, thanks for pondering this one.

[Sophy Freebirds]

;) its always a pleasure

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

There is something so beautifully haunting about this little poe,,, can't put my finger on why but it sent a delightful chill down my spine.

[Frieda P]

And you just sent a delightful chill down mine Dale, thanks muchly.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

You are most welcome Moonbeam.

[Cory Barrett]

Sounds like sweet surrender was bitter this time around. Nice write.

[Frieda P]

Indeed, clever Cory, thanks so much...

[John Alexander McFadyen]

If tis true then surender my Lady.

[Frieda P]

Did you read the broken heart 'tween the lines John.....? :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I am super glue my Lady!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

And hey I broke nothing!

[Frieda P]

Don't be heyin' me John, I know you, you're a heartbreaker, Pat Benatar sang songs in your honor! ;)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Got the wrong John me thinks. Tis my heart that is shattered glass!