Tattered ragdoll...

~an old creepy one, revamped & revisited

There once was a little girl, 

    who came into this life 

        filled with hope and zeal 

twinkling within wide eyed innocence,

she's left tattered and torn 

   her outward appearance 

       still appears shiny 

deep within the padding 

      there's a darkness so vile 

 

She looked up to him,

     expecting unconditional love

         and  unyielding protection

led into the lion's den,

     unaware of his intentions 

      her balance thrown 

               her purity shorn 

still continues along on her way,

      ...naivety shocked, 

she prayed within her crushed soul, 

Jesus never heard her pleas

 

Ultimately, developed into a woman 

   yet,  the child remained, 

wounded and fragmented,

         smashed beyond recognition 

          with words silenced 

     and wings broken, 

the journey was arduous 

              the end result troublesome, 

 ponders expectations of decisive justice 

 

Still feels like an old ragdoll 

            even though she's fully grown, 

her outward facade dissimilar 

                from the  shattered stuffing inside 

tries to turn it around, 

        reverse the reviled past 

          she lands in the median 

    stuck in fractured segments 

...still hopeful for survival

Author's Note

Reviews

[Rene Salinas]

Well this is heartwrenching but beuatifully poetic. Frieda gets me tangled up inside with this kind of thing plus she throws in that monster track that nearly made me headbang the wall great track (brownie points for that alone) but I fear that if I get stuck in the meaning I will diminish the poetry so in this ocassion I will go that way (points south). The language and the fact that the narrative has a story like quality was engaging as she uses the naivety of a child to relay convictions and how all that innocence was treated badly to say the least. Fast forward to adulthood and the image of the ragdoll which is really powerfull and the recognition that although she wants to change the past is not something that can just be thrown out of the windows as if.

Pretty Poetry

Thanyou

[Frieda P]

I'm not so sure it's pretty, but thanks so much for your thoughts Rene.

[Tate Morgan]

Your stuff makes me laugh smile and cry thank you

[TL Boehm]

What really sticks it for me in this one is it is much less cloaked by beautiful words than your normal writing. it is starker, simpler, direct - brutal yet there is that lift. Still hopeful. She feels shattered yet hopes for healing - she hasn't given up. Thats the takeaway.

[Sarah]

Your wourds are so powerful in this, it brings me close to tears every time. Its not a nice poem but its amazing none the less. :)

[DIVYA]

You are such a strong and wonderful person Frieda. Reaching out to you in spirit. May you be shorn off the darkness and be left only with light and joy one day. Sending hugs!

[Lauriegirl]

your words are so powerful and full of deep emotion. I have noticed that before with your writings. You have such a gift for reaching the reader's deepest heart and soul

[Troy Henson]

Frieda I was so close to tears with this one. Tattered ragdoll indeed. The will do move on and survive in life is human nature but the fact of the matter with some trauma although on the outside we look ok....its the inside that's tattered and irreparable. This had some stunning imagery Frieda and is quite an overwhelming write. Enjoyed this.


Troy

[Coyote Poetry]

Very good music and poetry.
"Still feels like an old ragdoll
even though she's fully grown,
her outward facade dissimilar
from the shattered stuffing inside
tries to turn it around, "
Easy to feel used and abused. Hard to know real strength and purpose again. Powerful description create sad vision and bad ending. No weakness in the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Avinash]

Rage, anger, survival, true grit all in one intense poem. It takes us to a place where the shadows fall. All I can give is one tight hug..you are not alone. Most of us who are here are screwed by life, hurts, suffocates but at the same time makes you unique because the beauty in your heart finally survived all.

[Sophy Freebirds]

Freida this was me- the tattered ragged doll!!:(... this is such a beautiful concept for a broken soul. You have attempted a new structure new type- which you did beautifully. The poem had a story like quality which very less poets - blessed poets can do. And the way you have done is remarkable. Absolutely,utterly ,truly Loved it Freida. Beautifully broken hope to be majestically mended. ;)

~Sophy

[Jon Roggie]

I like how this just flows. A story is told, sad, but the main character still has not given up hope. A grim and well written piece.