Standing Stone

Standing Stone

A Poem by Einstein Noodle

the privacy of her expectations

kept 
those things hidden tight  
                  I
pushed them into compression locks, she
squeezing shut and squinted yet
still oozing her secrets; it
couldn't be helped

in hieroglyphic mazes we bleed our ignorance

Tell me darling!            Please!                    I beg

standing  stupor with a pick- shovel 
and sifter ....shaking ... ever shaking 
through the debris  to glimpse
some bit of
understanding
            
never settling
honestly ........... tombs of the ancients are an easier task

01/24/2018
E.




© 2018 Einstein Noodle



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This is a deeply moving and personal journey written in a unique dramatic format- i can easily hear this as a spoken poem...a lover with the object of his love figuratively entombed by her secrets, expectations and emotional debris- and he trying to dig her out literally and figuratively. Brilliant metaphor. Eloquent and poignant words reveal unbearable
undercurrents of pain and frustration. I concur, a most formidable and long- suffering task to endeavor. I hope that luck, strength and infinite understanding prevail for this poor protagonist. Great write my friend!


Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Einstein Noodle

3 Weeks Ago

God bless you for your very understanding read of this..and thank you so much for pointing out what .. read more
Annette Pisano Higley

3 Weeks Ago

Your poem touched my heart E. Blessings and light wished back to you.:)



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He doesn't understand her, and I don't think she wants him to! Perhaps she keeps her secrets locked up, because she doesn't understand either! I love the imagery ..compression locks, hieroglyphic mazes, pick shovel. I sense the frustration and the irregular format seems to echo it. Clever poem.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Weeks Ago

ps. strictly from the man's point of view .. so i much appreciate you making the "other" sides case.. read more
Great Aunt Astri

2 Weeks Ago

I might write a poem in response! :}........
Einstein Noodle

2 Weeks Ago

oh i think you should Auntie ..please let me know if and when you do :)))))))))))))))))))
Damn those heiroglyphic mazes and the crumbs of answers that only lead to more questions.
I feel this is written with soft, pondering touch, rather than frustration, and if I am reading it correctly, a bit like your thousandth visit to see Mona Lisa...Still awestruck, but nowhere nearer understanding that enigmatic smile.
Perhaps more answers will come E, perhaps not...but there's always the hope of one day understanding.
Superb piece. Very contemplative and thought provoking.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Weeks Ago

thank you so much for your sensitive and thorough review ..yes..just try to understand the Mona's sm.. read more
Controlling the mood of a poem is well mastered here. It is a blending of the reader's perception and images created. A very excellent job

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Weeks Ago

thank you for taking time Cherrie! very much appreciate your reviews always ... thank you again!
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oh wow....those oozing secrets......we often find ourselves in the graveyards of our forgotten memories, trying to figure out, "How did I get here, again?".......You penned this one with the skill of a surgeon my friend......so, which type of surgeon are you? :P

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Weeks Ago

hmmmmmmmmmmmm the one with the butcher knife???? ;) thanks for your encouraging words Sleepless ..ye.. read more
First, despite my initial impression about the seemingly chaotic structure, it made sense after reading this poem. What first appears a jumbled mess of words actually reflects the message you convey here (or as I interpreted it).

I certainly get the pain and frustration, trying to "unlock" another person's brain, to understand them better, to get closer. It's what makes the closest relationships. Still, when we fail, or they don't allow us inside the inner vault, even after death (physically or emotionally), we still dig for the truth, a deeper understanding. And, sometimes we learn more from history than from the present. A mind-bending but thought-provoking piece. I enjoyed this work very much.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


Einstein Noodle

3 Weeks Ago

thank you for your honesty sir..glad you got past the lack of proper form...this is typically how i .. read more
Unfortunately, there is no way to guess what someone else expects of you and if it remains a hidden secret, no one can be happy....no one will get what they want. Such a wise life lesson in between the lines here, E. I enjoyed it. "Ever shaking through the debris to glimpse some bit of
understanding".....I have been there....and I relate. Excellent! Lydi**

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


Einstein Noodle

3 Weeks Ago

exactly Lydia ... its no fun is it!? i appreciate you quick insightful grasp of this poem's intent ;.. read more
Lydia

3 Weeks Ago

Those with no expectations are never disappointed, my friend. Always do what you feel is right and .. read more
Einstein Noodle

3 Weeks Ago

:) .i will take that advice my friend!
a clever piece here so well crafted..especially like the closing line,, very witty write all the way from start to finish..nice work Mr E..

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


Einstein Noodle

3 Weeks Ago

:) ...thanks Fran ... good to hear what you think .. glad you enjoyed my little humorous frustration.. read more
Ha, love the little clever line you decided to end it with...you have a knack for alliteration and that shines through this one! Another gem! Good writing, E.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


Einstein Noodle

3 Weeks Ago

one of the poets tools that can keep us out of trouble yet tell it like it is at the same time eh!? .. read more
sometimes it` is hard for us to figure it out,like a puzzle

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


Einstein Noodle

3 Weeks Ago

yeah! pretty much is isn't it wordman ..thank you for your time ..sure appreciate all your visits an.. read more
 wordman

3 Weeks Ago

always a pleasure
Yes, as a species, we can be quite an enigma, can't we? You about knocked me off my feet, (and or legs) with the line, "in hieroglyphic mazes we bleed our ignorance". Talk about knocking the ball out of the park, I think you just busted its stitches!

Kelly
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Posted 3 Weeks Ago


Einstein Noodle

3 Weeks Ago

ohh hi babe! ;) thanks so much for your perspectives and very encouraging words ... i could not ask .. read more

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