No Feelings

You left without reason.

Really had me believing,

That your feelings were true.

But it was a lie,

Because yours were shrinking as mine grew.

Reviews

[Phillitup]

SUGGESTIONS: With short poems it's really easy to pick and choose really little things for suggestion. Honestly though, this was so well-written that I couldn't find anything I would have wanted another way. I think you set the mood well and chose all of the right words. You used punctuation and used it correctly. I truly can't think of anything I would change. I feel like the title adds flare. Perfection. You may not believe so but it's true. As far as suggestions go I really have none.
EMOTIONS: Heartbreak and sadness are the true backbone to this write. The problem with heartbreak is that, often times, authors capture it a bit to sappily. They exaggerate it horribly. And if they don't then it's really not there. Righting about heartbreak is probably one of the hardest things for a writer to do. Someone they loves dies, heartbreak. Someone you care about hates you, heartbreak. Downfall in relationships, heartbreak. On the other hand, a couple of magnificent artists on this website can truly capture the essence of heartbreak. I think, in this poem particularly, that you have truly and beautifully captured the ache and searing pain of heartbreak. Congratulations! I applaud you heartily.
COMMENTS: As far as comments go, I don't have much in the way of them ever. This would be a prime example of one of the pieces where I need to stop reviewing right now and reread it. Okay. I have my thoughts now. I felt a real slap in the face when you said "But it was a lie,"that really stung. It just got more intense in a crying, sticky tears way as you read the last line. This is a really deep emotional level to capture, honestly. The fact that a reader can see the person, feel the tears that you never talk about is amazing. You have painted such a vivid picture that you take the reader on an amazing journey that presents them with particular reason and connections towards this piece. Nicely and poetically penned.
Best regards,
Dell

[Mir]

Perfection? Wow. I cannot tell you how happy/giddy that made me! But not just that, this whole review! Thank you so much for reviewing and giving your thoughts on this!

[Phillitup]

Of course! Anytime!

[donjuan]

This one is short and bittersweet, but it decribes how many relationships are...sounds like a bad man just lost a great gal...too bad it sounds like his lose.

[Mir]

Thanks for your review!:)

[de_maruf]

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[de_maruf]

fine

[Aly]

Totally honest and the real deal of today's world.
This happens to many of us.

So real. I love it.

[Mir]

Thank you very much!

[Aly]

Welcome!

[.Lost Soul.]

Short, simple, sweet. Hit the point and go kind of poem. I like it! (:
100/100

[Mir]

Thank you! :)

[.Lost Soul.]

No problem :)