MUSIC♥

A very important part of my life that keeps me alive and active..hope you like it :)

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MUSIC♥

 

Music makes the pain go away,

Subdues the rage of poison

And would always make my day.

Music is known as the speech of angels

The mediator of spirit and sensual life.

It soothes also weary people.

 

But what if music was not brought to the world?

I know there would be no happiness

No happiness to give

No life to live.

No voices to share

No talents to spare.

 

Whenever I hear music

I know I’m bound to be surrounded by it.

And surely and honestly,

It won’t disappoint me.

Music lives in me

And describes who is the real Me.

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Author's Note

Same as the first one..please help me! Thank you very much! :)

Reviews

[bianca]

i love how you described music. it runs deep within the soul.

[Dev]

I ♥ this !! Music's my soul !! ♪♫

[sickgonzo]

Your passion is conveyed intensely. I Like it. There's a real honesty in the imagery, if that makes sense. really nice:)

[jhed]

thank you thank you so much..I appreciate your concern for my poem..Thanks for the correction..

[TheTruthInTheLie]

Ah. This is where I am strong. I have a couple of suggestions. In the first stanza instance:

Subdues the rage of poison

And always make my day.

This could be better as

Subdues the rage and poison
And will forever make my day

Showing that music is eternal...

You also, in the scond stanza swapped from present tense to past
I thought it looked wierd, shouldn't it be
I know there will be no happiness
insead of I knew there would be no happiness?
It would flow better with the pattern of the poem.

Of course this is just my personal opinion.
You dont have to take any of this to heart.

Overall this is a wonderful poem, and very striking to me. Keep up the good writing.
:)

[<3beneathstars;]

So trueee. loved this. ps your picture is so cutee.

[Demetria.Ro$e.Hathaway]

Amazing Poem
I Cant Live with out music lol
Grate job :D

[rielovella]

Nice!!! Really liked it... Music rocks!!!

[jhed]

Thank you so much! I really appreciate what you said..Its a big help!

:)

[LisetteCanWrite!]

Nicely written tribute to what music means to you.. the format is very nice.. this is a free flow that is true to my heart.. as music can do all you have written all through life! Great job.. keep up the great work!