A Prayer

My attempt at a villanelle

Dear God, save us from those who wish us ill
Now hate has filled their hearts and minds. It seems
We lost our way the day the earth stood still.

The world has watched the radicals who kill
All for a faith that preaches of extremes.
Dear God, save us from those who wish us ill.

Fear has been forged and moulded to their will
To pave the way for wars of jingoes’ dreams.
We lost our way the day the earth stood still.

Intolerance now spreads from those who fill
Their worlds with sin and with Your name blaspheme.
Dear God, save us from those who wish us ill.

Give us the strength to remember goodwill
And fix a world we’re tearing at the seams.
We lost our way the day the earth stood still.

In prayer I wait, compelled to watch until
You hear our plea. And so ‘til then I’ll scream,
Dear God! Save us from those who wish us ill!
We lost our way the day the earth stood still.

Reviews

[Cherrie Palmer]

Excellent poem. I love writing this form. I don't use it near enough and your prayer of help and hope showcases just how power this poem is and you smoothly navigate its measures.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

I like the structure of the poem, it is brilliant and this piece is realistic. Thanks for sharing.

[Sacha Davison]

This is awesome. The first villanesque poem I've read. It's quite an interesting style of poetry and you seem to be rather good at it. Keep up the good work! (:

[Leigh]

This sounds very much like a prayer and is filled with fear and uncertainty, it is very strong and moving

[Lenny Banks]

So much sadness and pain, this is very well written. It looks like a prayer but reads as a song. Excellent work

[James E. Peterson]

a good poem. nicely centered around religion and the things people do in the name of God.

[Leslie Philibert]

Another fine poem, great structure, considered content, written with care from somebody who understands and likes writing - fine job.

[Mia]

A prayer worth praying and a poem worth reading!!

[X]

I like the repetition and the switching of the lines "We lost our way the earth stood still" and "Dear God, save us from those who wish us ill". Quite good imagery and techniques all around.

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[Frieda P]

This is so deep, it made me cringe a bit...all too much truth in those words, too much pain. Nicely written but so much sadness.