Broken Mirror

I'm looking into a broken mirror

tiny shards reflecting me

but every piece has something similar

flaws... everywhere I see

A stupid, annoying, hopeless person

just a waste of space, time, and air

why should I even try?

I'll just end up in failure

eventually the pieces of glass

will be scattered on the floor

and I would have fallen apart

my heart, and soul worn and tore

I'm seeing nothing worth looking at

just a gruesome beast

uselessness in a skin coat

to say the least

I'm looking through the broken mirror

seems like I'm staring into nothing

maybe that's all I am

not going to be much of anything

Reviews

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

I love the thoughts that begin to form in the first stanza, and then the emotions that start to hit more in the second stanza. The way you forward the imagery and feelings in stanza three then continue to stanza four, I love how you word the imagery of yourself as a person in the world. Last stanza; that last line... there's so much to you, as well as this poem. Nice emotion and rhyming. Thoughtful write for ones-self.

[Emily]

This is a good piece and I understand what you were trying to evoke from it. Very good. Keep writing.

Also, in the last line, and this is just my opinion, but I think you should change anything to something. But again, that is just my opinion.

[Maan]

It is doubtlessly, a good piece. I really enjoyed it. Thoughtful, decent, humble in its way, perfectly honest. :) Good work, good thoughts. :) :) Keep it up.

[Sarah]

Amazing work. well done

[SUGATA M]

Definitely me, it is so nice to read and get linked to your showering feelings

[Becky Clancy]

Nice work (:

[Deandra Dawn]

A lot of people can relate to this. Nicely done.

[Morrigan Nicole]

oooh, i really liked this one, maybe because this is how i feel about my self, broken mirror or not. i always love it when i can relate so well to someones writing. i adore the first two stanzas, the imagery amazes me!

[Stone.]

I really loved this, especially the imagery of the first stanza, it really brought me into the poem!
It's great, I just found one error (at least I think it is..): "my heart, and soul worn and tore" I think it should be "torn" not "tore".
Cheers :)

[Krimson]

i love it,, "but every piece has someting similar" my fav. line of them all.
i like it, its deep and poe and it shows great emotions.. ive always loved peoms using mirror metaphors (: