The ruins

The ruins

A Poem by Juliespenhere
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Writing quick as I go a love lost poem maybe

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Old stones
Old pavers
Old headstones
Cracked earth
Rain pours down
On those ruins babe
Those ruins of my heart

Like tears
Wash away the dirt
Wash away the lies
Kick away the stigmor
Use my gum boots wisely
All yellow and shiny babe
Like a summers sun
Kick the mornings truth
Take away
The filthy deceit
The ruins in my heart

It’s November
I remember well babe
The ruins of our hearts
Like pebbles lying there
Some of circle
Some are square
The ruins
The ruins
You no longer
Rule my heart babe
The rainbow s🌈
End
It took the ruins babe
It also healed my heart
Babe

Saturated rain
On green grass
I lay here babe
Waiting for
The sun
To bake
My melted heart like cake
My soul dripping just like
That sweet icing babe
To make me whole again

The ruins
Are gone
At
Long last babe
Those special
My very own
Our very own old
Now
November
Ruins
Of our hearts babe
Like dust to rainbows 🌈
End
Goodbye the ruins of my heart
Babe



© 2018 Juliespenhere



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An amazingly creative way to tell this story with intriguing imagery & just the right touches of repetition. I love the way, in spots, you make a brief statement, then a little further on, you expand on this thought including the first bit of introductory phrasing. It ends up sounding like a haunting refrain. I love the blend of this haunting tone with the seemingly-warm affection conveyed by sprinkling "Babe" thru-out. I love the way the ending is like a Phoenix rising from the dust, all with high originality! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 3 Months Ago


Juliespenhere

2 Months Ago

Thanks so muchly Margie xx
It somehow sounds like song lyrics more than a song... But it was a very good write.. Thank you for sharing

Posted 3 Months Ago


Juliespenhere

2 Months Ago

Thanks ghost sorry for late reply thank you
I’m glad the end of the rainbow brought end to the ruins and the ruins brought new beginnings- the end is yet a new start- it reminds me of the song McArthurs Park- ‘ Someone left the cake out in the rain’ ... beautiful 🌹

Posted 3 Months Ago


Juliespenhere

3 Months Ago

Thanks so much
Yes love that song
Awesome poem Julie. Love the way it flows so naturally and rhythmically- like a song. Seems so real like you are standing and talking intimately to an old love. “November ruins of our hearts babe”- great metaphor and imagery. Repetition of “babe” and “the ruins”-so poignant. All cleansed, she starts again...Beautiful.

Posted 3 Months Ago


Juliespenhere

3 Months Ago

Thanks Annette
I really appreciate your review
A very good five minute poem.
"Goodbye the ruins of my heart "
Hard to leave things behind and move on. Thank you Julie for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 3 Months Ago


Juliespenhere

3 Months Ago

Thanks for stopping by
And taking time to review much appreciated!
Coyote Poetry

3 Months Ago

Was my pleasure and you are welcome.
Juliespenhere

3 Months Ago

Ok thanks I’ll visit yours soon
Woke up day off Monday this spilled out quick didn’t know why or what but another five min poem

Posted 3 Months Ago



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Juliespenhere
Juliespenhere

Sydney , Australia



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Amateur old poet well not that old but not a young 20 anymore I still work full time and live to write I write at least five poems ditties every weekend I write quickly it just flows and bubbles qui.. more..

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