Learn

Healing leads to strength but takes so much time.

I will learn from this wound,

see an undimmed day.

I will learn from the endless nights,

kneeling down to pray.

This wound will be my eternal present,

 reminding me of you.

This wound will be my inner strength,

 sustaining me through.

I will learn that I hit rock bottom,

 weeping so much.

I will learn that God heals me,

 one gentle touch.

I pray you feel conviction,

 for innocents you did wrong.

I pray you learn to love,

a beautiful song.

 

Reviews

[Antony]

Hi Jen, Indeed, the healing process takes so very long, sometimes never ending, especially with the deepest of love. I have learned, that the key to it all is learning how to forgive, it helps to speed the process along and we feel much better in the long run, not an easy task, but it is what our created would want us to do. The rhyme scheme flows well and doesn't seem forced, the last line, I think you need to remove the word "the" Nice expression of your true feelings.
Antony

[Kari]

good

[Jason]

The healing does take away, especially emotional healing. Praying on a regular seems to be the only thing that works, replacing fear with hope.

[A.r. Bazian]

i like!
especially the idea behind the "Song"!
deep!
emotional yes, but deep!

i like!
keep it up!

[THE BLACK SEAL]

sometimes i suppose it can be hard to get over such things. not my cup of tea, but you portray it nicely.

[Celtic Cat]

such a sweet compilation of words....yes, healing is essential and not always in our time. You have great wisdom.....keep sharing it!!!

[Bennett Logan]

Not bad at all... I think your changes really helped the flow. Good write, my friend.

[Bennett Logan]

I like this... There's something about learning through heartache. It hurts, but it's almost worth it, you know? Anyway, about the poem... I only have two suggestions.

1. Try taking out every word that doesn't absolutely need to be there.
2. Try using a list-like format. Example:

"I will learn from this wound and see an undimmed day,
the endless nights I knelt down to pray.

This wound will be my eternal present to remind me of you,
will be my inner strength to help sustain me through."

...and so on. I think it may help the poem flow a little better.

I hope you find my suggestions helpful. I enjoyed reading this piece. Keep up the good work.

[extreme booger producti..]

Putting references to wishful thinking (prayer) and imaginary characters (god) aside, I can relate to what you are trying to express here. It's hard moving on from a broken relationship, but that's the only way you can find someone else�

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

Nice poem. well written, repeating, "i will learn" in your stanzas more than once. it's good to take our hard experiences (there are may) and turn them into learning experiences, to help us grow stronger. nice job!

[Kaitlyn]

Everything happens for a reason and to me that is what this poem says. "This wound will be my inner strength to help sustain me through." is my favorite line! This is the silver lining to this great write!
Great job!