Daddy

How come you left me before you could see me grow?

There's so much missing here and you will never know.

Maybe I would have been better if you were still here.

Sometimes I have dreams and I feel like you are near.

I wish I could talk to you and tell you how life's been.

You're with the angels and I am left in this world of sin.

Reviews

[SPINNING ON that dizzy ..]

Those you love never truly leave you. The tone is that of a child wanting the parent there.... wondering the differences time and attendance would make different, better, changed...... We are molded by our parents.... they leave their mark..... sometimes good, sometimes bad, sometimes hopeful as what could have been different.... I know this plight.... I feel this pain in your words and in my memory as well.

Kath

[Voice]

This is beautiful and I can relate my father passed away 12 years ago when I was 2. I often think about him and how life would be different if he was still here. Thanks for sharing this it really helps to have understanding�

Voice

[Kari]

sad

[John Braswell]

Good read This work flows easily, says a lot in few words, and pulls emotion out of the reader. Good job

[J. James Reider]

This is a very heart warming piece... There is so much emotion packed into so few words... I also like your rhyme scheme which is a simple aabbcc but it gives the work a good flow and very nice feel... good job!

[Mr. Lopez]

He walks with you every day of your life and forever lives in your heart! Nice poem from you to him.

[Damian Alan Gray]

Good poem! I like the way it reads as a letter from a child to a wayward father, but then ends that the father has died. Nicely done.

[youngwriter222]

This is a short heartbreaking poem, I aam sure that your dad is watching down from you from heaven. He would never leave you in this world alone even though it seems like it, he is still with you in spirit.

Loved the poem

[Antony]

this is a heartbreaking tale, so very sad that this person never had the opportunity to know their Dad, and the hope of that is layed to rest, Jenn this is very well written, no questons here.
Antony