Ours

Ours

A Poem by SPINNING ON that dizzy edge

I look for you...
  in a crowded room
  in the stillness of my beating heart
  in a restaurant - that was ours...

I dream of you...
  when the cool air comes in the window
  when that dating commercial comes on
  when I hear a song - that was ours...

                      I miss you...
 as I walk around that favorite store
                 as I think - what would he think?
 as I watch that silly show - that was ours.....

I might be there...
  if you called and asked me 
  if you made a moonlight wish
  if you could share the space 
that was ours.....

K Nehls

© 2014 SPINNING ON that dizzy edge



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Gentle thoughts that seem to bring about memories within your speaker that pack a punch, and a hard one at that. What I like about this is how it twists the normality of what everyone perceives during their normal days and morphs it into an item that holds a cumbersome message to the soul. The longing in this piece, existing throughout the entirety of the poem, is what ties the knot, for me. Truly a well-written piece.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

SPINNING ON that dizzy edge

3 Years Ago

thank you for your kind review :)



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This was ethereal; one could feel the ghosts of what was once upon a time. I could feel as I read.

Posted 2 Years Ago


It'll turn into nostalgia, but not soon enough. Somethings sometimes gnaw and need a scratching. Nicely done.

Posted 2 Years Ago


SPINNING ON that dizzy edge

2 Years Ago

thanks for the review. Sometimes it is just sad. Some days you think about what could have been..... read more
This makes my heart ache. I feel the void ... no ... the chasm, where "that other" used to reside in the narrator. Something of them certainly still resides there, but there is a yawning void where they once were. This one hurts, as I believe it is supposed to.

Posted 2 Years Ago


SPINNING ON that dizzy edge

2 Years Ago

Thanks for the spot on review! Should not hurt, but it does. Other relationships swing close but m.. read more
Gentle thoughts that seem to bring about memories within your speaker that pack a punch, and a hard one at that. What I like about this is how it twists the normality of what everyone perceives during their normal days and morphs it into an item that holds a cumbersome message to the soul. The longing in this piece, existing throughout the entirety of the poem, is what ties the knot, for me. Truly a well-written piece.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

SPINNING ON that dizzy edge

3 Years Ago

thank you for your kind review :)
It's funny how so many little things can remind us of the one we love, or the one we long for. I definitely can relate to your words. Simple and yet, heartfelt.
Beautiful poetry!

:) Julie

Posted 3 Years Ago


SPINNING ON that dizzy edge

3 Years Ago

thank you for your review you understand :)
Oh my, such a beautifully melancholy write… when a loved one goes away the memories remain sparked by many things that you two shared.

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

SPINNING ON that dizzy edge

3 Years Ago

Thank you - we all know what it is like to be hurt and how we feel it in so many ways - memories, dr.. read more
The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)

3 Years Ago

You are most welcome my talented friend.

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SPINNING ON that dizzy edge
SPINNING ON that dizzy edge

Buffalo, NY



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Some of my work is very personal and some is flight taking fancy... a writer's prerogative... :) Read something of mine and I will read something of yours - very nice and simple and what a way.. more..

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