Rise up Rise up!!!!

Rise up Rise up!!!!

A Poem by Riddhi
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A poem from the core of my heart

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Time comes when you just cry and cry ,
At that time you should tell yourself to again and again try.
Every diamond was earlier a coal ,
Do not limit yourself to just one role.


Rise up, rise up whenever you fall ,
those who demoralize you, you have to show them all.


when everything you possess ,
life appears like a bed of roses.
you have everyone as your friend ,
and happiness becomes your trend.


But when you are enveloped by problems,
you understand that on this bed of life there are more thorns than petals.
fair - weather friends are discovered.
true friends are the one who always cared.

Every dusk is followed by a dawn ,
Every autumn is followed by a spring.
Thus every failure is followed by success.

Courage is not to be shown ,
when it is easy to show.
Brave is not the one who moves from light to light ,
but the one who moves from dark to light.

Rise up , Rise up whenever you fall
Those who demoralize you , you have to show them all !!!!!!!




© 2016 Riddhi



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Riddhi
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I love the lines "Courage is not to be shown, / when it is easy to show." So beautiful. I love your wording. Keep up the great work:)

Posted 2 Months Ago


Riddhi

2 Months Ago

Thank you..I am happy that you liked it..
Your poem is an uplifting message that’s well-balanced between expressing real-life & yet also showing many of your ideas using metaphors from nature. Sometimes a poem like this can sound a little hollow to a person who is feeling down. Lots of times, people who are feeling down will think – this is easy for you to say, becuz you are not near-suicidal. Lots of people in a bleak state of mind do not want to have someone telling them to cheer up. If they could cheer up, they would! So, with all that understood, I feel your poem is as sincere as any uplifting poem could possibly be & that’s why your poem doesn’t feel at all offensive when you tell people to stand up & get tough & be in the fight. There’s a perfect balance to your message, so that it doesn’t come across in a superficial “rah! rah!” way. I can feel your depth of sincerity (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 2 Months Ago


Riddhi

2 Months Ago

Actually few days back I was also in the same state, I didn't want to live but I used to read this p.. read more
barleygirl

2 Months Ago

Life can be a struggle . . . I'm glad you're feeling better!
Beautifully expressed and so heartfelt.

Posted 2 Months Ago


Riddhi

2 Months Ago

Thank you maasi..
Lovely use of words, rhyme scheme firmly placed. Very motivational and simple to understand. Effective in every sense of the word.


Posted 2 Months Ago


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Riddhi

2 Months Ago

Thank you..I am glad that you liked it..
It may be hard and it may seem impossible but take that leap. Jump as far as you can. If you fail, don't lose hope. Even if you fail one time or a hundred times, all you need is that one time where you didn't fail and you succeeded. You only need one "Yes" in a sea full of "No's". Don't lose hope.

Amazing!

Posted 2 Months Ago


Riddhi

2 Months Ago

Thank you..Actually I am waiting for that one yes in a sea full of no's but I don't know when I will.. read more
Written beautifully and every verse has meaning behind it which supports to the main idea of the whole poem. No fluff added.

Inspirational Poems Contest

--Alina The Cacti

Posted 7 Months Ago


Riddhi

7 Months Ago

Thank you...
"Every diamond was earlier a coal." I like the fact that the diamond message has been used a lot by many yet you made it beautiful that I felt the message of it in new way. The whole poem was inspiring and heart felting.

Posted 9 Months Ago


Riddhi

9 Months Ago

Thank you...If you wish you can try reviewing my ither writings too...Thanks again for your review..
Riddhi

9 Months Ago

Sorry by mistake i wrote ither i meant other
Wow... So empowering! I absolutely loved it. It is so well written! Beautiful! The examples you have given are just so creative.

Posted 9 Months Ago


Riddhi

9 Months Ago

Thanks Anjali..if you wish you can review my other writings also...Thanks again for your review...
Anjali

9 Months Ago

Sure! You are welcome!!
This is very motivational poem as it seems and it catches the heart of a reader. Even though you are young yet you have a big potential. Keep writing!!

Posted 9 Months Ago


Riddhi

9 Months Ago

Thanks for your review...I am happy that you liked it...
This poem has such a strong message, and many people in this world (including myself at times) need to take the advice it gives. In our darkest days, we must remember that there are better times ahead. This made me feel inspired and optimistic after I read it. It's good to know that someone such as yourself is out there trying to send out positive vibes. We need more of that.

If I may critique, I feel like the rhyming and flow could be improved by changing the lenght and/or wording of some lines.

The second line, for example, would flow better if it were worded as follows: "At that time, you should tell yourself to try."

Line six would flow better if you wrote "Those who hurt you -- show them all."

Those are just a few examples. If you wanted to improve the flow of this piece as a whole, I'd suggest making sure each rhyming line is almost the same length.

Also, I'd like to see you try unrhyming poetry ... I think it would fit with the strong, expressive, almost converational tone that I see in your poems.

Thank you for sharing your work.

- William Liston

Posted 2 Years Ago


Riddhi

2 Years Ago

Thank you william and yes i will surely try unrhyming poetry also and thank you for spending your pr.. read more

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