Rise up Rise up!!!!

Rise up Rise up!!!!

A Poem by Riddhi
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A poem from the core of my heart

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Time comes when you just cry and cry ,
At that time you should tell yourself to again and again try.
Every diamond was earlier a coal ,
Do not limit yourself to just one role.


Rise up, rise up whenever you fall ,
those who demoralize you, you have to show them all.


when everything you possess ,
life appears like a bed of roses.
you have everyone as your friend ,
and happiness becomes your trend.


But when you are enveloped by problems,
you understand that on this bed of life there are more thorns than petals.
fair - weather friends are discovered.
true friends are the one who always cared.

Every dusk is followed by a dawn ,
Every autumn is followed by a spring.
Thus every failure is followed by success.

Courage is not to be shown ,
when it is easy to show.
Brave is not the one who moves from light to light ,
but the one who moves from dark to light.

Rise up , Rise up whenever you fall
Those who demoralize you , you have to show them all !!!!!!!




© 2016 Riddhi



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Riddhi
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Written beautifully and every verse has meaning behind it which supports to the main idea of the whole poem. No fluff added.

Inspirational Poems Contest

--Alina The Cacti

Posted 4 Months Ago


Riddhi

4 Months Ago

Thank you...
"Every diamond was earlier a coal." I like the fact that the diamond message has been used a lot by many yet you made it beautiful that I felt the message of it in new way. The whole poem was inspiring and heart felting.

Posted 6 Months Ago


Riddhi

6 Months Ago

Thank you...If you wish you can try reviewing my ither writings too...Thanks again for your review..
Riddhi

6 Months Ago

Sorry by mistake i wrote ither i meant other
Wow... So empowering! I absolutely loved it. It is so well written! Beautiful! The examples you have given are just so creative.

Posted 6 Months Ago


Riddhi

6 Months Ago

Thanks Anjali..if you wish you can review my other writings also...Thanks again for your review...
Anjali

6 Months Ago

Sure! You are welcome!!
This is very motivational poem as it seems and it catches the heart of a reader. Even though you are young yet you have a big potential. Keep writing!!

Posted 6 Months Ago


Riddhi

6 Months Ago

Thanks for your review...I am happy that you liked it...
This poem has such a strong message, and many people in this world (including myself at times) need to take the advice it gives. In our darkest days, we must remember that there are better times ahead. This made me feel inspired and optimistic after I read it. It's good to know that someone such as yourself is out there trying to send out positive vibes. We need more of that.

If I may critique, I feel like the rhyming and flow could be improved by changing the lenght and/or wording of some lines.

The second line, for example, would flow better if it were worded as follows: "At that time, you should tell yourself to try."

Line six would flow better if you wrote "Those who hurt you -- show them all."

Those are just a few examples. If you wanted to improve the flow of this piece as a whole, I'd suggest making sure each rhyming line is almost the same length.

Also, I'd like to see you try unrhyming poetry ... I think it would fit with the strong, expressive, almost converational tone that I see in your poems.

Thank you for sharing your work.

- William Liston

Posted 1 Year Ago


Riddhi

1 Year Ago

Thank you william and yes i will surely try unrhyming poetry also and thank you for spending your pr.. read more
Rise up , Rise up whenever you fall
Those who demoralize you , you have to show them all !!!!!!!
ending is really beautiful ..
i love reading it

Posted 2 Years Ago


Riddhi

1 Year Ago

Thanks for your kind words....
How old are you? In 3 years times rewrite this poem, I want too see your growth of life so rewrite it not as is but write it with same ideal process, which your words will describe a different better understanding hopefully.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Riddhi

1 Year Ago

I am 15 years old and definitely i will do as you said but when i will write this poem don't forget .. read more
hey ! it was really inspiring one ....

Posted 2 Years Ago


Riddhi

2 Years Ago

Thank you....
I liked your overall theme of the poem. It remained strong throughout, your rhyming pattern was very Impressive! You had many moods In the poem, I really liked that.
And, hey, is it too much to ask if you could review my latest, most wildest piece, 'Letters to Rachel' And maybe review it? There'll be many more letters to come :)
Anyways, Thank you for sharing!

Regards with Infinite love.


Posted 2 Years Ago


Riddhi

2 Years Ago

Thanks for spending your precious time in reading my poem...I will definitely try to review your wri.. read more
Put a comma between 'again' and 'try' in the 2nd line...

It'll help I swear.



Posted 2 Years Ago


Riddhi

2 Years Ago

Thanks for reviewing...I will try to follow your advice....
David of the Demers

2 Years Ago

"Do. Or do not. There is no try"
Yoda

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