sorry!?!

its an expression and a question

we start from a surprise encounter
i never thought it will become deeper
until we look like a mutual lovers
but now i know it will be never

reminiscing the past hurt
I'm ashamed cos Ive been a jerk
oh Goodman this i feel is an irk
how i wanted to lurk in my mom's skirt

sorry....
that word makes me weary
are you beginning to be merry?
knowing now that i have received your sorry?

don't you know your killing me softly?
hope you know I'll never be hurt by another honey
no one will make me lonely
the way you had done to me...
 

Author's Note

its been a common situation but reality bites ...........................
even though they don't have teeth ...........

Reviews

[Indecisive and Loving I..]

I like this poem :)
I agree! A 'sorry' can't repair the damage that has been afflicted. But sometimes you just have to grin and bear it. I haven't even gotten a 'sorry' for something that has completely altered my life and who I am, but I must grin, bear it, and move on.
That line about "lurk in my moms skirt" kind of struck me as incestuous and misplaced, not as "i need to hide from the big meanie!" So, I'm not sure exactly how the audience is supposed to take it. Maybe a different word choice?
I loved it, nonetheless :) VERY NICE!
Just a tip: Try working on lining up your verb tenses.
i.e., "we start from a surprise encounter,
i never thought it will become deeper"

This is full of emotion! Great!

[Aldora Sparrow]

I think this a good start, but, poem-wise, it needs a bit of patching up. I would suggest reading it aloud. Poetry is meant to be read aloud and I do that even for my stories to find awkward and/or run-on sentences. Try it out.
Otherwise, nice idea going

[Cheyenne]

I like it its really good i know how you feel!

[PaperHearts]

Nice write! You expressed your emotions really strongly in this piece, and reading this took me back to moments in my life where I'd either been the person saying sorry, or the person who sorry was being said to. You had some great lines in your poem, particularly in the first stanza. The only thing that I would maybe suggest is to perhaps drop the rhyming, and try writing free verse, because in a way, I kind of felt like your rhyming took away from the fundamental effect of what you were trying to say. A few typos here and there, but other than that, this was a well written, honest, heartfelt, vulnerable write. :)
~PaperHearts

[deeps]

sorry....
that word makes me weary

Isn't this true? This is a wonderful write here,
It's hurtful but written well. You expressed the
feelings well,

[Haifa]

It is great poem, each line is telling story or a situation. At all it is very good poem. Well done

[Coyote Poetry]

The many lines of this poem I like. You made your points with your words. Disappointment leave us hurt and we need to be wiser and walk into love with open eyes. Total poem was strong. I like the ending. I like when a woman call you honey. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Nianque]

Unfortunatly that happens a lot more than I would for it to happen. :( Keep up the great work and its well written ! :)

[Ryou]

Nice. Those kinds of things are unfortunate. D: