sorry!?!

its an expression and a question

we start from a surprise encounter
i never thought it will become deeper
until we look like a mutual lovers
but now i know it will be never

reminiscing the past hurt
I'm ashamed cos Ive been a jerk
oh Goodman this i feel is an irk
how i wanted to lurk in my mom's skirt

sorry....
that word makes me weary
are you beginning to be merry?
knowing now that i have received your sorry?

don't you know your killing me softly?
hope you know I'll never be hurt by another honey
no one will make me lonely
the way you had done to me...
 

Author's Note

its been a common situation but reality bites ...........................
even though they don't have teeth ...........

Reviews

[Indecisive and Loving I..]

I like this poem :)
I agree! A 'sorry' can't repair the damage that has been afflicted. But sometimes you just have to grin and bear it. I haven't even gotten a 'sorry' for something that has completely altered my life and who I am, but I must grin, bear it, and move on.
That line about "lurk in my moms skirt" kind of struck me as incestuous and misplaced, not as "i need to hide from the big meanie!" So, I'm not sure exactly how the audience is supposed to take it. Maybe a different word choice?
I loved it, nonetheless :) VERY NICE!
Just a tip: Try working on lining up your verb tenses.
i.e., "we start from a surprise encounter,
i never thought it will become deeper"

[Jessica]

Well written. Good Job.

[Victoria]

This was very well written. good job.

[A.Lee]

Nice work. Situations like that do suck no matter how much they sugarcoat it.

[Devons]

Yeah, I know exactly where this poem is coming from... Is the next line after 'sorry'.. 'I hope we still can be friends'...?? I think it is.
Having been on both sides of this situation over the years, I can see how the 'sorry'-sayer will hand out pretty much any placation they can in order to get away lightly.. But saying sorry is pointless in the end - if it's over, it's over, there's no more to be said.
This little story-poem portrays the victim's position quite nicely and the bitter consequences it will have on future relationships..

PS. the only thing that i couldn't quite get was... what is a "Goodman"?? - or is that meant to be 'Oh, God man!' ?? And a couple of typos...