Running In the Same Direction

So very dearly I have missed you

But my aim is getting better

 

Through anything, I will find you

Through rage or through love

You will see me again, eventually

 

In everything dear to you

You will see me again, eventually

Author's Note

Reviews

[H L Rose]

How pleasant! It’s kind of simple yet emotional at the same time. The first two lines are my favorite. I like how you’ve made these lines utilize both meanings of “missed”.

I think this is the closest you’ve ever gotten to any kind of structure. It’s new.

Much enjoyed.

[Davidgeo]

I've written a little over one thousand poems on this site... my use of structure is only new to you.

[H L Rose]

Either way, I enjoyed seeing it here.

[Davidgeo]

I'm glad to hear to hear that.

[Nipplegrinder]

You're either an old romantic, or the next mass shooter.

[Davidgeo]

More romantic lover than any kind of spree killer.

[Cherrie Palmer]

You are creative no matter what hat you have on.

I like how you let this piece find it's own voice, even if it is a dark one. Good work.

[Davidgeo]

Aww... thanks Cherrie.

[J. B.]

I loved the simplicity of this. A small suggestion I have (unless you intended it to be as such) would be to avoid capitalizing the first word of each stanza. But the message in this is clear and concise. good work.

[Davidgeo]

Thanks man. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

As a rule I capitalize every first word of every line but I don't capitalize anything anywhere else. It's a pretty standard practice among poets going back literally many hundreds of years ago. Is that distracting or misleading somehow? No offense but I'm not sure I understand the point of that suggestion.

[J. B.]

The point of that suggestion is that to modernize the flow of poetic work, as well as really capture the essence of it, capitalizing the beginning lines of stanzas regardless of whether the previous stanza had led to a completed statement makes work oftentimes harder to understand/relate to and choppier. There are plenty of well known poets who utilize other methods of punctuation and sometimes utilize none of it. Check out some of my own work for examples. :) Keep working on it and getting better! :)

[Davidgeo]

I respectfully disagree that capitalization as I use it has a significant effect on whether it is or is not choppy. And nothing should be about being similar to "well known poets", that's just weak minded. Your statement about modernizing is just irrational, poetic form should be a timeless thing not a trendy thing. All that aside, it's how I personally prefer my work to be presented. I've seen your work, I do not feel compelled to emulate it in the slightest.

[KWP]

:) did you write this? :D this remind me of a show I saw last year - Alan Cummings sings sappy songs ... you know Alan Cummings right? It was a great show - he is a great human. Have you been out rolling in the spring fields or sumfin? Go out and roll again ... this is lovely ... I will meet you there - we can hike some X

[Davidgeo]

You mean Alan Cumming? (no "s" at the end) Yes, I know of Alan Cumming and that specific cabaret show. He's high quality, but I have to be in a certain mood. And it was that other mood who wrote this poem. I'm not sure where that son of a b***h is at the moment... he never tells me nothin'.

[KWP]

SOMetimes you crack me up and sometimes you don’t - today you did s or no s you know your people - always 😃

[BBP]

Loved this! Especially the first two lines. It is a mirrored poem, written in love and written in obsession. Promised threats. I really enjoyed it.

[Davidgeo]

I'm glad you enjoyed. It's less of threat and more of a promise but I you can go either way. I kinda left it a little ambiguous so the reader can see themselves. Whether you take it positively or negatively is a reflection of the reader's current emotional state. Though, the song at the end kinda f***s that up.

[BBP]

You did that and it's always my favorite kind, it cane be taken any way you wanna take it. The song just made me like it more....anyone who can pair it up with Rancid is golden in my book.

[Tabby Mac]

The song at the end was a nice touch. Coming from an abusive relationship in the past my first reading of this piece gave me the wrong impression, like someone who can't let go of someone in an unhealthy way and it disturbed me.
I think it was the word aim. It made me think of "If I can't have you no one can." This is the type of man I had dated all those years ago. And seeing friends of mine in similar relationships not as lucky as I was to escape with my life. So some of your word choices I guess were triggers for me.

The author note with the song helped me see the heart behind this piece.
With this new perspective I can say it is a nice piece with a heartfelt sadness, and relatable...

[Davidgeo]

It can be about whatever you'd like it to be.

I'm sorry you had to go through an unhealthy relationship. Experience's like that tend to make a person jaded and takes away a certain kind of innocence that rarely can ever be replaced.

What is initially felt in abstract things like poetry, music or art is a reflection of yourself and the state of your emotional center. You eventually allowed yourself to see something positive in that poem, that's a good sign of not being hopelessly jaded or emotional broken.

[Tabby Mac]

Yes one is forever changed. I’d like to think I’ve overcome. In some cases all is lost for some, but in others an awareness is birthed of a different dimension one where you can use your past pains to help others who have experienced the same, or expose the behaviors before they take another victim.
Oh and all the counseling in the world helps too! Lol

[Davidgeo]

Indeed, a new awareness. Good on you for making something positive out of something negative. As Arnold Schwarzenegger once said a very long time ago... "you can't grow without burning".

[Tabby Mac]

Indeed!!!
Crash and burn but get back up!