ADONIS

The Unwanted Marriage

 

 

 

 

 

 

When I spit fire into the realm

The prom orb astounds with flame

Venus kissed  my passionate name

Playing with the fire is the name of the game

Lusting nymphs reached my solid strong swords

Princess imprisons me, as she spells the cursing words.

Now my world closed in complete darkness

The dungeons so deep, where my suffering is boundless

My swords no longer in fire

My armor soaked in the cold mire

As my hands had reached the stone wall

I shouted so loud, hoping somebody heard my call

 

 

Reviews

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

I am just writing for a month and no background in the world of poetry. Hope you will always share your wisdom and correct my mistakes as I need it to solidify my dreams to write. Thank you, I love you all.

[Mariam]

I like it a lot...lovely imagery and catchy flow :)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Mariam :)

[Junert]

This is a good one.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Junert :)

[khalid]

very nice imagery taking the reader to many areas, into space, into the past, into dreams...but since your poem is real, i really liked reading it. very nice flow and very nice rhyme..

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks habibi albi :) I appreciate it big time :) thanks for believing.

[keyvan]

wow..wow..wow...here is a beautiful write...

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Kevan I appreciate your review :)

[Nick.B]

Interesting imaginary, you managed to show that feeling of breaking free when you're down and feel trapped...great job

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Nick. B thanks for the kind review.

[KeelyJane]

Awesome imagery and great theme. Thanks for sharing

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Kelly :) appreciate it much! :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

trapped...and how ironic..to be imprisoned by a princess...

sometimes the chase is better than the catch.

nice imagery here.

jacob

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Mr. Jacob I appreciate your review :) thank you.

[DIVYA]

Always the prize for the deception and recklessness with which Adonis lives. It has to be a cold and lonely end. I know someone like that.

Thanks Marc. This poem had a special meaning to me. Its a marvelous write.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

lol :) Thanks Divya, I am glad it reflects in your personal experience. Thanks for the review.

[Lady Etheria]

Well done.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Lady :) He found his match the powerful witch princess lol :)