Haiku #16

Haiku #16

A Poem by mattavelli
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senryu

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perhaps we are clocks
simply here to tell the time
and stick our birds out

© 2016 mattavelli



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mattavelli
Please let me know what you think.

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If one doesn't stick their birds out once in a while....they could go coo-coo...sorry that was bad.

I enjoyed your poem. Thanks for sharing.

Posted 11 Months Ago


mattavelli

11 Months Ago

Thanks, Joe! :)
LOL. This is so fun. My mind was in the gutter cus of the last sentence tho

Posted 1 Year Ago


mattavelli

1 Year Ago

Thank you, Jessica! :)
This is more of a Senryu that a Haiku to me. Anyways, it is nice hehe kinda smile with this one though.

Posted 1 Year Ago


mattavelli

1 Year Ago

Thanks for reading! :)
Yes, it is a Senryu.
CAPOLAVORO

1 Year Ago

I thought so :) It has a hint of a joke in there. :)
Hahhahahahha loved it! Made me smirk

Posted 1 Year Ago


mattavelli

1 Year Ago

Thank you! :)
I won't tell you the visual that I came up with in that last line... It's very clever.

Posted 1 Year Ago


mattavelli

1 Year Ago

Why won't you tell me, Ana? :)
Ana Papaya

1 Year Ago

Necks, I thought of necks. Sticking your neck out.
This is a nice blend of philosophical & playful. I totally get the visual you convey about the bird . . . could be a cuckoo clock or it could be the middle finger! *wink! wink!*

Posted 1 Year Ago


mattavelli

1 Year Ago

Thanks, Barleygirl! :)
i think you are stretching this a bit ... i am not sure of the role that clocks and time play with birds .. i think perhaps you are just having a bit of fun taking your haiku to a bit bawdy side ..
E.


Posted 1 Year Ago


mattavelli

1 Year Ago

Thanks, Einstein! :)
Bawdy and a bit cuckoo
Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

:) .................
I don't know whether to Ha or argh at this, being the jealous type that is envious of those who can haiku, when I haikant. :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


mattavelli

1 Year Ago

hi, Nemo!
I'm sure you haikould
if you haik-gave-it-a-shot
it's really easy
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Added on December 4, 2016
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LIFE IS A PARTY. DON'T BE A PINATA. ------------------- Hello, Welcome to My page. I'm Matt. I enjoy reading and writing poetry. If you have a poem that you'd like me to read, please let me know .. more..

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