Mind Twist

Mind Twist

A Poem by mattavelli
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A pantoum inspired by the faithful :p

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If you would let me twist your mind,

you’d see the spiral of my thought,

where any answers you might find

could be the very faith I sought.

 

You’d see the spiral of my thought,

a lie that you are flawed from birth;

could be the very faith I sought

is your denial of your worth.

 

A lie that you are flawed from birth;

it could be true, don’t toss the dice.

Is your denial of your worth

not worth eternal paradise?

 

It could be true, don’t toss the dice.

There’s nothing earthly worth your soul,

not worth eternal paradise.

Relax to it. Give me control.

 

There’s nothing earthly worth your soul.

Let worship cleanse your heart of sin.

Relax to it. Give me control

and let the current feed the spin.

 

Let worship cleanse your heart of sin.

Yes, slip into this bless-ed sea

and let the current feed the spin.

Embrace your gullibility.

 

Yes, slip into this bless-ed sea

where any answers you might find

embrace your gullibility

if you would let me twist your mind.

 


 

© 2021 mattavelli


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What is this type of poem called? Remember I cannot! Duh.

I was listening to a podcast today about how culture and tradition is malleable. Your words above reminded me of this. In this world today we have all taken knowledge, wisdoms, we have taken the earth, we all believe we are right. But know, if we take we must give, and understand we have come this far, it's just a turn around the corner to ultimate acceptance and equanimity.

And, just like your poem, it's all a bit confusing :D

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mattavelli

1 Month Ago

Thanks for reading! :)



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I've seen this form before. I have to admit I get a little confused when reading a pantoam. I have to try and remember what was said in the last stanza even though lines are repeated being there's something else added to them. Hope that makes sense.

You do know more than I do about these forms.

Posted 1 Week Ago


mattavelli

1 Week Ago

Thanks for reading, Relic! :)
You should write a pantoum, then I can read it and be confused... read more
 Relic

1 Week Ago

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I love poems that repeat lines for emphasis. Thought-provoking for me. I’m not sure if this is the direction you were going, but it spoke to me saying Let Go and Let God. It could represent many ideas to different people. Well written!

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mattavelli

2 Weeks Ago

Thanks for reading, Suzanne! :)
Unfortunately I have to take medication to keep my mind where it is and any further twisting (by You) could be its undoing
But thanks for the offer.
Were U able 2 follow my directions

Posted 4 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mattavelli

3 Weeks Ago

Thanks for reading, Dave! :)
What is this type of poem called? Remember I cannot! Duh.

I was listening to a podcast today about how culture and tradition is malleable. Your words above reminded me of this. In this world today we have all taken knowledge, wisdoms, we have taken the earth, we all believe we are right. But know, if we take we must give, and understand we have come this far, it's just a turn around the corner to ultimate acceptance and equanimity.

And, just like your poem, it's all a bit confusing :D

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mattavelli

1 Month Ago

Thanks for reading! :)
I liked the repetition of lines throughout this poem. We all have worth....those who do not recognize their own worth have a difficult time in life. There is much introspection here and a lot of thought provoking lines. Good one. Lydi**

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mattavelli

1 Month Ago

Thanks for reading, Lydia! :)
The intricate and sophisticated process you laid on this is in a creative class all its own! Definitely a piece to read over and over and grow from! Excellent!

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mattavelli

1 Month Ago

Thanks for reading, Travis! :)
What does your tattoo say?
Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)

1 Month Ago

Hero to few... the accompanying tat is on my back, and reads: Villain to many.
not fair! You already twisted our minds but the problem that You left us with no real answer of (yes or no), truth I wouldn't mind at all for someone to twist my mind and do the "fixing" for me but I think this would be impossible LOL ok real review now :) this is smart Matt, You really stired the brain and the form You chose was perfect along your "twisting play" I believe the answer is different for each individual, your job was not to give the answer but to motivate finding it, and You did :)

Posted 1 Month Ago


mattavelli

1 Month Ago

Thanks for reading, Light! :)
I'm just parading the absurdity of it. Haha
It hurts me .. read more
Light

1 Month Ago

keep parading my friend :)
I like this write very much! It is deeply spiritual and filled with wisdom. Your words have blessed me today! ~Sharon

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mattavelli

1 Month Ago

Thanks for reading, Sharon! :)
I love it....................

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mattavelli

1 Month Ago

Thanks for reading, Stan! :)
you've mastered this form
great writing in both
form and content;for
sure not the easiest
to write..I've done 2
of these

but one got deleted
by mistake.
never to be found again
well done Matt



Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

  Fran Marie

1 Month Ago

you're welcome Matt
seems you found it
and I thank you again
where the heck
read more
mattavelli

1 Month Ago

"where the heck"... Glitch. We're falling apart. Haha
  Fran Marie

1 Month Ago

yes a glitch..
my reply didn't
go through.
all the way
just was referrin.. read more

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