Ballade for Denial

Ballade for Denial

A Poem by mattavelli
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Ballade

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Should you attempt to ease my pain,
take warning, mine's a toxic brew,
with any spillage sure to stain
and burn its noxious way down through
those armored plates protecting you,
concealing that soft heart beneath,
a treat this beast will slowly chew...
the hopes left stuck between sharp teeth.

My dark mind's torn and hardly sane,
left barren since her love withdrew,
and charities would but profane
those memories I hold askew,
those cloudy thoughts of love so true,
those daggers hid in yearning's sheath
that slice when others misconstrue...
the hopes left stuck between sharp teeth.

Go hang from your damned sugarchain
of coaxes meant to help renew.
There are no passions to regain.
There's nothing left here to imbue.
My shattered rose rejects your glue.
It's not a blossom for your wreath.
So, toss your thoughts of breaking through...
the hope's left stuck between sharp teeth.

And, if a doubt remains as to
the character that's underneath,
then tease my shell and watch me spew
the hopes left stuck between sharp teeth.

© 2016 mattavelli


Author's Note

mattavelli
I let the idea of writing a ballade tumble around in my head for about a week, then wrote it all in one late night go. Why did a monster pop out?
Please let me know what you think.

Check out this link for an explanation of the ballade form and a lovely poem.
http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/RichardJ/1619403/

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A very masterfully written poem! I'm afraid I'm repeating myself in every review I leave in response to your poems, but it's your fault (haha). Seriously, you're a wizard with words. The pain and frustration are oozing from the lines - that's a compliment, considering the topic and the contents.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mattavelli

3 Months Ago

Hi, Laz, thanks for reading! :)
This one was a lot of fun to write.



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A consummate write, smooth and poetically expressive. I sense both aggression and humour in this fine piece!

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mattavelli

1 Month Ago

Thanks for reading, Robert! :)
Powerful write Matt. strikes great balance between sneer and pain of needing to exercise a demon. Love the "go hang from your sugarchain" a great metaphor, love when poet seizes an image in a wholly original way

ken e

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mattavelli

1 Month Ago

Thanks for reading, Ken! :)
A very masterfully written poem! I'm afraid I'm repeating myself in every review I leave in response to your poems, but it's your fault (haha). Seriously, you're a wizard with words. The pain and frustration are oozing from the lines - that's a compliment, considering the topic and the contents.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mattavelli

3 Months Ago

Hi, Laz, thanks for reading! :)
This one was a lot of fun to write.
Your rhythm and syntax have hints of Shakespeare, which means it has a nice rhythm.

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mattavelli

4 Months Ago

Thanks for reading, W! :)
They took a bite out of you huh? Then picked their teeth with shards of your sanity! I like the concept of trying to repair a relationship with the glue, most likely the sticky residue from the sugarcane. Shattered rose! Nice one!

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mattavelli

11 Months Ago

Thanks for reading, William! :)
Now this was visceral and powerfully spoken from pained experience. Very jarring because the words seem to come from a place few wish to truly reveal, a place of agonizing truth. Exceptionally written, Matt. And incredibly emotive. You truly are a poet, more so then I could ever be.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mattavelli

1 Year Ago

Thanks for reading and the compliments and self-deprecation, Carlos! :)
Wow mattavelli, there is some wrath here. A nice dose of bitterness laced with just a flavour of poison lol.

Go hang from your damned sugarchain

With hope left between sharpened teeth, I don't think there's the slightest chance of reconciliation.

Love the ballade format. Lovely flowing lines.

All the best

Chris

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mattavelli

1 Year Ago

Thanks for reading, Christine! :)
Love the has drifted away and is never coming back has left the heart and the person shattered

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mattavelli

1 Year Ago

Thanks for reading, Poet! :)
Poetic Beauty

1 Year Ago

You are welcome. Love controls many emotions
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Wow, just wow!! What a nice rhythmic write this is! Anger spewed out so vividly yet interestingly. I like the repetition of the line" The hopes left stuck between sharp teeths"... It shows denial of any consolation... So many sharp emotions are there within this... Thank you so much for sharing this...

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mattavelli

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and the feedback, Dreamer! :)
I love the ballad form and the flow is perfect; this is a kind of a push and pull love affair; I like the phrases...” hope left stuck between sharp teeth”.....I like the idea of a monster- like demon with a shell, but what’s underneath? I still see some hope in this bitterness.
Thanks for sharing
Best, Betty

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mattavelli

1 Year Ago

Thanks for reading, Betty! :)
I'm sure this guy will work through his issues eventually. Haha
Betty Hermelee

1 Year Ago

Hope so, doesn’t matter, it’s a beautiful poem

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