Ballade for Denial

Ballade for Denial

A Poem by mattavelli
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Ballade

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Should you attempt to ease my pain,
take warning, mine's a toxic brew,
with any spillage sure to stain
and burn its noxious way down through
those armored plates protecting you,
concealing that soft heart beneath,
a treat this beast will slowly chew...
the hopes left stuck between sharp teeth.

My dark mind's torn and hardly sane,
left barren since her love withdrew,
and charities would but profane
those memories I hold askew,
those cloudy thoughts of love so true,
those daggers hid in yearning's sheath
that slice when others misconstrue...
the hopes left stuck between sharp teeth.

Go hang from your damned sugarchain
of coaxes meant to help renew.
There are no passions to regain.
There's nothing left here to imbue.
My shattered rose rejects your glue.
It's not a blossom for your wreath.
So, toss your thoughts of breaking through...
the hope's left stuck between sharp teeth.

And, if a doubt remains as to
the character that's underneath,
then tease my shell and watch me spew
the hopes left stuck between sharp teeth.

© 2016 mattavelli


Author's Note

mattavelli
I let the idea of writing a ballade tumble around in my head for about a week, then wrote it all in one late night go. Why did a monster pop out?
Please let me know what you think.

Check out this link for an explanation of the ballade form and a lovely poem.
http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/RichardJ/1619403/

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Now this was visceral and powerfully spoken from pained experience. Very jarring because the words seem to come from a place few wish to truly reveal, a place of agonizing truth. Exceptionally written, Matt. And incredibly emotive. You truly are a poet, more so then I could ever be.

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mattavelli

4 Months Ago

Thanks for reading and the compliments and self-deprecation, Carlos! :)



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Now this was visceral and powerfully spoken from pained experience. Very jarring because the words seem to come from a place few wish to truly reveal, a place of agonizing truth. Exceptionally written, Matt. And incredibly emotive. You truly are a poet, more so then I could ever be.

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mattavelli

4 Months Ago

Thanks for reading and the compliments and self-deprecation, Carlos! :)
Wow mattavelli, there is some wrath here. A nice dose of bitterness laced with just a flavour of poison lol.

Go hang from your damned sugarchain

With hope left between sharpened teeth, I don't think there's the slightest chance of reconciliation.

Love the ballade format. Lovely flowing lines.

All the best

Chris

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mattavelli

5 Months Ago

Thanks for reading, Christine! :)
Love the has drifted away and is never coming back has left the heart and the person shattered

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mattavelli

5 Months Ago

Thanks for reading, Poet! :)
Poetic Beauty

5 Months Ago

You are welcome. Love controls many emotions
Wow, just wow!! What a nice rhythmic write this is! Anger spewed out so vividly yet interestingly. I like the repetition of the line" The hopes left stuck between sharp teeths"... It shows denial of any consolation... So many sharp emotions are there within this... Thank you so much for sharing this...

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mattavelli

6 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and the feedback, Dreamer! :)
I love the ballad form and the flow is perfect; this is a kind of a push and pull love affair; I like the phrases...” hope left stuck between sharp teeth”.....I like the idea of a monster- like demon with a shell, but what’s underneath? I still see some hope in this bitterness.
Thanks for sharing
Best, Betty

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mattavelli

6 Months Ago

Thanks for reading, Betty! :)
I'm sure this guy will work through his issues eventually. Haha
Betty Hermelee

6 Months Ago

Hope so, doesn’t matter, it’s a beautiful poem
I like your Ballade very much, Matavelli. It's bitter + sweet, all rolled into one. I think it works very well on a psychological level, as well, because sometimes, emotional truth can feel like our worst enemy - we are damned if we let it out and damned if we don't. Thank you for sharing. L.

Posted 2 Years Ago


mattavelli

2 Years Ago

Thank you for reading, Linda! :)
Ha ha, loved the monster, it has a fine way with language and a dirty mind try a bit of freestyle sometime, and truly release the beast, good write,

Posted 2 Years Ago


mattavelli

2 Years Ago

Thank you for reading, gram! :)
all brilliant, all true and all absolutely hilarious... this made me laugh the whole time i read it. What a vermicious ballad of brilliance!!! Oh how I used to be this guy, the honesty in this is write absolutely beautiful.
I will be saving this! Style wise the rhyme and rhythm and the flow were great and the subject matter fantastic. what an awesome night you had in the making of this one... you must of slept in a golden wave of satisfaction after finishing this write good sir. Wow

Posted 2 Years Ago


mattavelli

2 Years Ago

Thanks! :)
I am proud of this one. Rhyme wise its the most restricted poem I've written. Thin.. read more
Robert Trakofler

2 Years Ago

you should be proud of it. mostly my own forms i toy with the idea of a sonnet occasionally. I model.. read more
wow ... aa poet after my own heart; lovely form with a repetition, perfect rhyming ... it flows just like a ballade should.

wonderful poetry my friend A++

Posted 2 Years Ago


Stella Armour

2 Years Ago

I haven't my friend, but after reading yours i have downloaded the form, so am just working on a st.. read more
mattavelli

2 Years Ago

I'd like to read it when its finished. :)
Stella Armour

2 Years Ago

Am first two verses in .. will finish it soon :)
Wonderful use of rhyme, rhythm, refrain and stanza structure!

Posted 2 Years Ago


mattavelli

2 Years Ago

Thank you, BlackPrince! :)

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