Ballade for Denial

Ballade for Denial

A Poem by mattavelli
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Ballade

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Should you attempt to ease my pain,
take warning, mine's a toxic brew,
with any spillage sure to stain
and burn its noxious way down through
those armored plates protecting you,
concealing that soft heart beneath,
a treat this beast will slowly chew...
the hopes left stuck between sharp teeth.

My dark mind's torn and hardly sane,
left barren since her love withdrew,
and charities would but profane
those memories I hold askew,
those cloudy thoughts of love so true,
those daggers hid in yearning's sheath
that slice when others misconstrue...
the hopes left stuck between sharp teeth.

Go hang from your damned sugarchain
of coaxes meant to help renew.
There are no passions to regain.
There's nothing left here to imbue.
My shattered rose rejects your glue.
It's not a blossom for your wreath.
So, toss your thoughts of breaking through...
the hope's left stuck between sharp teeth.

And, if a doubt remains as to
the character that's underneath,
then tease my shell and watch me spew
the hopes left stuck between sharp teeth.

© 2016 mattavelli


Author's Note

mattavelli
I let the idea of writing a ballade tumble around in my head for about a week, then wrote it all in one late night go. Why did a monster pop out?
Please let me know what you think.

Check out this link for an explanation of the ballade form and a lovely poem.
http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/RichardJ/1619403/

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I like your Ballade very much, Matavelli. It's bitter + sweet, all rolled into one. I think it works very well on a psychological level, as well, because sometimes, emotional truth can feel like our worst enemy - we are damned if we let it out and damned if we don't. Thank you for sharing. L.

Posted 1 Month Ago


mattavelli

3 Weeks Ago

Thank you for reading, Linda! :)
Ha ha, loved the monster, it has a fine way with language and a dirty mind try a bit of freestyle sometime, and truly release the beast, good write,

Posted 1 Month Ago


mattavelli

3 Weeks Ago

Thank you for reading, gram! :)
all brilliant, all true and all absolutely hilarious... this made me laugh the whole time i read it. What a vermicious ballad of brilliance!!! Oh how I used to be this guy, the honesty in this is write absolutely beautiful.
I will be saving this! Style wise the rhyme and rhythm and the flow were great and the subject matter fantastic. what an awesome night you had in the making of this one... you must of slept in a golden wave of satisfaction after finishing this write good sir. Wow

Posted 4 Months Ago


mattavelli

4 Months Ago

Thanks! :)
I am proud of this one. Rhyme wise its the most restricted poem I've written. Thin.. read more
Robert Trakofler (Bad Bunny)

4 Months Ago

you should be proud of it. mostly my own forms i toy with the idea of a sonnet occasionally. I model.. read more
wow ... aa poet after my own heart; lovely form with a repetition, perfect rhyming ... it flows just like a ballade should.

wonderful poetry my friend A++

Posted 4 Months Ago


Stella Armour

4 Months Ago

I haven't my friend, but after reading yours i have downloaded the form, so am just working on a st.. read more
mattavelli

4 Months Ago

I'd like to read it when its finished. :)
Stella Armour

4 Months Ago

Am first two verses in .. will finish it soon :)
Wonderful use of rhyme, rhythm, refrain and stanza structure!

Posted 4 Months Ago


mattavelli

4 Months Ago

Thank you, BlackPrince! :)
Now THAT is a lot of hate. Beautiful though.

Posted 5 Months Ago


mattavelli

5 Months Ago

Thanks for reading, Frederika! :)
It's not hate. It's denial turned to anger at one who offer.. read more
The only word my mouth uttered after reading your entry is 'WOW'!! I am just speechless before this work. You had done an excellent job. I like the lyrics, the rhymes and what not??
Thank you.
Hearty Congratulations!!

Posted 1 Year Ago


mattavelli

5 Months Ago

Thank you, Raj! :)
Wow!....Seriously.....no words could justify the sensation I have after reading this. The rhythm is great, the musicality is fantastic, the imagery is strong, and it simply tells a great story. Even the refrains hit the right notes!! Well done!

Posted 2 Years Ago


mattavelli

2 Years Ago

Hello, emi! :)
After two weeks of receiving no reviews, i get five from you within an hour. T.. read more
emipoemi

2 Years Ago

The pleasure was all mine.
Lately I'm not adventurous with trying new forms & I'm not familiar with the ballade, but here you've done such a bang-up job with rhythm & rhyme, I kinda want to try one myself someday. I like that all your expressions are filled with originality & I like the way there's a bit of venom seeping thru-out this vehement little rant. The first stanza is especially good as far as the message & structure. I love this line: "go hang from your damned sugarchain of coaxes" . . . a prime example of your nicely tempered rant.

Posted 2 Years Ago


mattavelli

2 Years Ago

Thank you, Barleygirl! :)
The ballade was fun to write. The rhyme was a challenge. Give it a .. read more
Reading this again. Same rhyme repeating each stanza. Love that. I have one or two like this. The meter is precise. Like that, too. To me more important than the rhyme. Combined, very nice indeed. Most difficult and highly structured. This takes extreme discipline and creativity. My only (very small) quibble is that lots of the rhymes are properly internal rhymes and not rhymes at the ends of a thought (sentence or clause). In the strictest of forms, I prefer to see those written as the internal rhymes that they are. But still, my God, this is very nice, and as captivating as before. Not many on WC could even approach a write such as this. If I just consume this whole, I am refreshed and deeply satisfied. Wonderful job. No change in my high rating.

My very best regards, and I'm sorry I have been a stranger to your writes.

Rick

Posted 2 Years Ago


mattavelli

2 Years Ago

Thank you, Rick! :)
Someone once commented that he liked my use of enjambments. So, I looked .. read more
Rick Puetter

2 Years Ago

Yep, this is certainly a stylistic choice, isn't it? Not my preference, but others are free to have.. read more

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