To You

To you, the sky is falling.
To you, it's forever night.
To you, there is no savior.
To you, there is no light.

To you, my help is useless.
To you, the world is grey.
To you, no bodies listening.
To you, there is no play.

To you, things are dying.
To you, we've reached our dawn.
To you, the world is ending.
To you, we'll soon all be gone.

Reviews

[icerhex]

Beautiful, very challenging poem. I must congradulate you on the constant rhythm that is kept, it's sometimes very difficult to do that in a poem.

[wonderful_wishes]

I love this. It is very beautiful.... I think this poem holds more power than many that i have read before....

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The world is what we make of it. This is a good example of that. Nice writing.

[rachael]

this was really beautiful! it flowed so well like the words were painted together. i loved it

[None]

I love this. It's totally a perspective on cynics. :) Great write. You nailed this one.

[bursting colors]

its kinda creepy but its something that keeps you reading

[babygirlz]

its intense i like it

[Zombie Waffle]

I like it.

A point might be to write a form of 'conclusion' onto the end. Something that doesn't begin with 'To you'. It would have a lot of impact on the reader.

But still, a good poem. ^_^

[MELODY CARNEY aka Kimbe..]

I liked this. Nice job and thank you for the good read.

[Ajgirl99]

This is kind of scary. xD But it is great! Maybe a little to many, "To you" 's in there, but I can deal!