The Break Up

This is a free write poem I wrote after my recent break up.

With a single sentence you killed my dreams

Took apart my heart at the seams 

Cut me in half like a lazer beam

Destroyed my soul

Put me out like a cigerette 

and spit on my grave

all of this at the same time

my only guilt was loving you

for that i paid dearly

you say you dont feel the same

my broken heart is my own blame

the foibles of my own imagination

a disaster oof my own making

I guess I was the mistro 

In the orchestra of I love you's

I played the violin 

And sang the song of our demise

When all in all it was nothing more then your rhymes

Your lies and your lines

I am so dispicable for being their

Through thick and thin

For holding you up for oh so many months

I am to be hated for this

When in all reality your only mad 

Cause what you've done to me

Has made you feel bad

Reviews

[Katherinee .]

This is just amazing. It really expresses your emotions through the brake up & also comparing them to "objects". I love it.

[CROSS QUARTRMANI]

I love it!!!1

[Gina Mags]

two thumbs way, way up for this! the analogy you used when you said you were the mistro, orchestrating the "i love you's" as you played the violin of your demise... wow. totally captivated me. you have a way with words, you know. i enjoyed this poem a lot!

[rwar ish me]

very passonate. very good poem

[♥ Kasey ♥]

this poem is amazing! it touches my heart. it makes me want to cry!

[Ninja10]

this is exactly how i felt... the words rhyme perfectly.. love the idea of an orchestra... wow... just wow :)

[Phalen Schuyler]

it's odd, after my break-up I never really thought that anyone could ever feel what I felt then, and what I still, after all this time, feel now.
Guess I was wrong, because this write almost exactly says the thoughts that are in my own head.
I very much like the similes and the imagery. I've read loads of poetry about heart-break and such, and this is a refreshingly different style from what I usually see.