Forest of Her Eyes

Forest of Her Eyes

A Poem by Addict With a Pen
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It was easy getting lost in the forest of her eyes...

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It was easy

Getting lost in the forest of her eyes

Being tangled and twisted

In her variety of vines

Wondering how I had not seen

Her curious stare of

Evergreen before


Because her eyes

Are nature’s finest works of art

A maze and a riddle

One I learned to love by heart

Because I love being lost

In her everlasting stare

In her forest of green







© 2017 Addict With a Pen



Author's Note

Addict With a Pen
Let me know what you think...I was having trouble with this one

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Are nature’s finest works of art
A maze and a riddle
One I learned to love by heart
Because I love being lost
In her everlasting stare
In her forest of green


wow :) i loved the way you have described her eyes... your poems always reaches out to me..
and am glad i came across this one,
reading a beautiful poem is a good way to start the day :)

but i prefer blue eyes over green always have.. :P

Posted 6 Days Ago


This is so packed with imagery, I felt the limbs brushing my skin as I read. Everything about this is brilliant & cohesive as an extended metaphor. Some of your word choices convey a ton of sensory impact. Very well crafted!

Posted 5 Months Ago


Addict With a Pen

5 Months Ago

Thanks for reading! I'm glad you liked the imagery :) I love green eyes
barleygirl

5 Months Ago

I love when a writer can say "I love green eyes" without using the common primary color "green"!
I love this piece!! the theme and all the forest analogies are 10/10!!

Posted 5 Months Ago


Addict With a Pen

5 Months Ago

Thank you!
I like it, don't really have anything to add but it's nice

Posted 6 Months Ago


Addict With a Pen

6 Months Ago

Thank you for reading :)
Although your author's note said you had trouble with this one, I certainly couldn't tell as I read. Every line flowed seamlessly into the next and every description felt light and natural. I loved your metaphors and how you built on them throughout the piece. Overall, nicely penned.

A minor quibble: I find the word "gorgeous" in the last line of the first stanza redundant. In my opinion, words such as that (gorgeous, pretty, beautiful, etc.) rarely add anything to a piece. I think the warm feel of the poem as well as the beauty of an evergreen in itself convey the thought without you having to call it gorgeous.

- William Liston

Posted 6 Months Ago


Addict With a Pen

6 Months Ago

Thank you, for the suggestion and review :) I appreciate it!

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Added on March 28, 2017
Last Updated on September 23, 2017
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