broken promises

broken promises

A Poem by Irvette Dauphine
"

this is my teacher's feeling actually

"
i miss you
i told you when i about to leaving
please always call me or at least message me
because i have jobs
and i cant always beside you
but, why you didn't call me?
why you didn't message me??
i ask you why
then you said you cant because you have problems
i want to know it, share to me, maybe i cloud help
but you said that we shouldn't talk about it
i know, maybe your problems make me worried
but, you know what
i already worried to know that you have problems
and you don't want to share it to me
so, i wont to disturb you
i wont to send you message anymore
it's like we are in stage of cool-off
you know what, i cant stay at that situation
but, that you want
so, what can i do?
i don't want to put myself into shame
so even if i don't want to, i'll do it
you know, you broke your promise
you said that you always call me or at least message me
and don't hidden the truth, because i am is your girlfriend
but, you wont to tell me
what the used of me as your girlfriend?
i can help you, can't i??

© 2012 Irvette Dauphine


Author's Note

Irvette Dauphine
sorry if this little bit mess
and sorry about my grammar and wrong word
enjoy it~

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I think it's sweet

Posted 6 Years Ago


Besides the grammar this poem is quite emotion, brimmed full with feelings and frustration from the heart ;) Broken promises... very sad yet entirely nice job!!!

Posted 6 Years Ago


Irvette Dauphine

6 Years Ago

thank~
wow sad but very poetic u did a great job expressing yourself.


Posted 6 Years Ago


Irvette Dauphine

6 Years Ago

thanks~
Colleen a Bean

6 Years Ago

You're welcome
I did enjoy it :) I can feel the frustration as you describe knowing that someone has a problem, but they won't open up about it. Very nicely done.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Irvette Dauphine

6 Years Ago

thanks~
that is so good :) 100/100

Posted 6 Years Ago


Irvette Dauphine

6 Years Ago

thanks~
Ruby

6 Years Ago

Your welcome :)
Very good work :) I really enjoyed it, and the emotion in this is great :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


Irvette Dauphine

6 Years Ago

thanks~
nice theme....i like it excluding the grammar.....but you know what.i can see improvement in your grammar...that seems really pleasing....keep working like this and i'm sure you'll become a great writer in future.all the best......

Posted 6 Years Ago


Irvette Dauphine

6 Years Ago

Yea.. I'll do my best to improve my grammar more..
And thanks, you give me more hope to not su.. read more
Sweetheart, you only need one question mark, not 2.
Tho this is really sad and amazing. I think you did a wonderful job :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


Irvette Dauphine

6 Years Ago

haha.. too much question marks, eh?
btw, thanks~
Love Demon

6 Years Ago

I can help you edit it if you want?
Irvette Dauphine

6 Years Ago

edit the grammar, that what i need ;)
wow... so you already have a boyfriend... anyway this is inspiring...
I ignored the grammar since it's understandable even without the write words... I'm wrong it's not the grammar but the spelling that is wrong here anyway it's great just write freely the way you can express yourself more... (:

Posted 6 Years Ago


Irvette Dauphine

6 Years Ago

thanks~
btw, this is not my feeling, have read the description??
Rhianne Ney

6 Years Ago

uhh... sorry):
Irvette Dauphine

6 Years Ago

it's ok :)
this is quite interesting. i understand well how this feeling is.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Irvette Dauphine

6 Years Ago

thanks~

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Added on August 24, 2012
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Irvette Dauphine
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i really like to read books!! and it would be awesome if i can write some story and be a great book writer.. in holiday and my free time i like to imagine stories and in my mood i like to write poems.. more..

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