The Shy Outside

This describes how it's hard for me to not be shy around people I don't know.

The eye twitch with embaressment

Body stiff under humid air

They laugh and stretch

The class of 09

Smile the mind whispers in the places of shadow

Detatched

Mind

No part with body

Stiff sweaty and trembling

No comfort in the hidden eyes

Yes

Hidden

So very hidden

Invisible blanket so tight so expected

Pages of this book never read

Not in open spaces

Not in shadowless minds

How to react

How to wake

They smile they are open

No

Not for this hidden stare

Reviews

[Benjamin L. Weekly]

"Invisible blanket so tight so expected
Pages of this book never read
Not in open spaces"

Very good three lines expressing the whole of shyness. I have myself battled with it but have mostly learned to deal with it with time and experience.

It comes with practice! There were some places that confused me, namely,

"Smile the mind whispers in the places of shadow"

and

"Not in shadowless minds"

and the last two lines left me wondering what you meant by them.

Compression is important in poetry, and yes, sometimes it escapes one person while the rest will get it (which is why you should take my words with a grain of salt), but if you write to share your thoughts, compression should be in some respect limited or at least masked by an easier to recognize message.

Geez, that was a long sentence. What I'm trying to say is, I didn't know what you were trying to say, and I wanted to.

As it stands, it's a fitting reminder of the shy part in all of us. With a few touch ups, this would be an even greater testament.

Thank you for sharing, Rin.
- Ben

I can relate to this poem! I am shy around people I don't know. I tend not to be able to even talk! This is very good! I liked the flow. Great write!

[Nana Carmine]

It's really hard to be shy, things always seem so awkward. you did a great job of expressing it. I really like this poem a lot. Good job.

~Nana Carmine