Lust

a mix of Richard Cory and My Papa's Waltz

they were pure beauty.
I saw them wherever I was.
always there,
watching.

there was an attraction
between us.
it felt real.
I hated it.

they looked at me
with passion,
but
uncomfort settled in me.

sexual frustration runs through me,
it doesn't settle.
the desire is never gone.
I feel nervous everyday.

Author's Note

explanation for those who want to analyze it: so basically its two people really telling the story but you don't know (I tried my hardest to make it flow but I gave up who gives a frickle).

the first part is the one who feels the lust and turns to stalking the person.

the second is the person who is lusted after and they start to notice these things and begins to feel uncomfortable although they "should be" flattered.

the last stanza is in present tense because i kind of saw it like the person has a restraining order but they keep pushing to see the person they lust after

Reviews

[keith]

i had to reread this several times and then it came to me ...
kermit was blocking me!
and then i read once more and it flowed so well as one piece rather than a combo of two
you have quite the talent for expression on a subject that too often is misgiven in words
good on you

[.]

I enjoyed this poem due to the theme of sexuality which I have been exploring myself in my poems. I really like the different perspectives in each stanza. Great read.

[Maria]

Interesting how you put it, to where both the stalker and the victim analyze and notice each other, and one is full of guilt for perhaps feeling flattered yet not wanting that much attention, while the other ,cannot help but look and wonder, what if....

[Richard simpson]

Love it! It's a great, intense poem that makes one curious on how one falls into the sinful lust of love and passion. Beautifully and compassionately written. Good job.

[Skib]

A gripping and ominous attraction which begs a sequel. How dangerous would it be to dance with this devil? Shows your true storytelling nature.
:). Just enough information to leave us wanting more.

[duff]

Nice job. It has a mysterious sensuality to it that keeps the reader interested until the last line.

[APOORVA]

alluring and phenomenal at one go