The Token , two hearts one love... (kleenex required)

The Token , two hearts one love... (kleenex required)

A Poem by shallimarRose
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This was a challenge picture... Just an empty locket...It started out as something very different...a poem about betrayal but as you know sometimes the muse grabs the pen and takes right out of our hand.......This took a very unexpected turn as I wrote and my favorite song came on the radio....It somehow split between years and decades and became two separate poems conjoined by love, time and circumstance.......If you have never seen the video "Just a Dream" by Carrie Underwood (and even if you have)** please take three minutes grab the box of Kleenex and watch the video after you have read both poems for the full emotional impact of this presentation...


Thank you., shallimarRose




    THE TOKEN

    (Two Hearts One Love)


    In tiny box

    in the bottom of her old dresser drawer

    beneath her satins and lace
    she kept it safe

    wrapped in memories and tied with tears

    was a tarnished remainder of one love

    a little thing really no bigger

    than a copper penny

    a small token once given

    so long ago

    It was the night of their senior prom

    she was all dressed in pale blue

    the color of his eyes

    her body trembled at the sound

    the doorbell ring

    he was there

    she was ready

    tonight would be the biggest night

    of their young lives

    she topped the stair with grace

    he walked up and met her half way

    a small embrace

    hand in hand he led her down

    where he gave it to her

    right there in front of her parents

    a small silver locket

    it was tied onto her corsage

    "I LOVE YOU”

    he dropped right there to one knee

    he asked her to marry him that night

    and she said yes

    and her mother cried

    and her father held back tears

    there was no ring

    just this tiny locket

    two small conjoined hearts

    silver in color

    etched with love

    the locket was empty

    the two small hearts awaited

    they awaited the day of the wedding

    when two pictures would be added

    one in black the other in white

    bride and groom

    pictures that she would cherish

    hold forever in her hearts

    and near her heart

    she would someday show this locket

    to children and grandchildren

    and tell them of this day

    when he dropped to one knee

    and this locket gave

    as a token of his undying love

    bj smith

    aka shallimarRose


    ******* *******

      Two hearts
      (the token part 2)


      The day was set

      the timing planned

      forever they would walk

      through life hand and hand

      the venue was chosen

      invitations were sent

      something blue something new

      something borrowed was lent

      the day planned outdoors

      would be sunny and warm

      he would wear his uniform

      she a white veil

      and a gown of white lace

      she dreamed of that day

      and the smile on his face

      ****

      but somewhere between

      his life and her dream

      came the duty that called

      him to arms

      a marine

      and this locket

      two hearts

      as the way this poem started

      were left empty and bare

      she was left broken hearted

      she never did marry

      no one could compare

      to the memory left

      by that boy on the stair

      sixty years to the day

      since the locket he gave

      and they placed today

      beside her in her grave....

      bj smith 

      aka shallimarRose






       

       

       

       

       

       

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© 2013 shallimarRose



Author's Note

shallimarRose
love your thoughts on both the poems and this emotional video. thank you. shallimarRose

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One word.....AMAZING! This is definitely one of my favorites of yours! It reminded me a little of a "Notebook" kind of style, written so eloquently as you captured the emotions throughout. The first part portrayed the perfect kind of love we all hope for, high school sweethearts, with big plans for the future. The second portrayed "somewhere between his life and her dream", a bittersweet ending. As for the song, always been one of my favorites, still shed a tear or two every time I hear it, and will always think of this poem when I hear the song :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


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shallimarRose

4 Years Ago

Thank you Traci.. on my other site many kept this to their favorites or in their notebooks.. I loved.. read more



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amazing poems..you touched my heart..

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shallimarRose

4 Years Ago

Thank you for reading. Always it is an honor when a poet can touch someone in a profound way. shalli.. read more
The entire piece is imbued with emotion. It reminds me of Nicholas Sparks. The song is beautiful and i am thoroughly moved by this montage.

Posted 4 Years Ago


shallimarRose

4 Years Ago

Thank you Blue.. I am always pleased when something I put together can move someone or touch a heart.. read more
A very moving write.

I liked the naivety in this. It was vulnerable and tender with the concept of young love.
It also pertains to the idea of a fairytale. You meet the love of your life, fall in love, get married and live happily ever after.

My friend passed away last week. He served in the army, got married last year and has left a young wife. He was 32. It's just so sad.

Posted 4 Years Ago


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shallimarRose

4 Years Ago

Oh Lola I am sorry...Did he die as a result his service or was he ill? Go in and read my "Grieve me.. read more
Clara

4 Years Ago

No, he died unexpectedly after a marathon race - without any known illness or conditions. He was in .. read more
The sweet innocence of the first poem and then the heartbreak of the second leaves such an impact. Truly amazing writing. This is one of those poems that just curls right up in your heart and stays there...and the video..the perfect addition!

:) Julie

Posted 4 Years Ago


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shallimarRose

4 Years Ago

Thank you Jewel, Yes this is one I am very proud of yet it was not at all what I had planned to writ.. read more
OH MY....I have goosebumps after reading this. The bittersweetness, the nostalgia, the fervid emotion of prom night. The stark contrast of the first poem being innocent and joyous and the second poem being filled with loss and heartbreak was so effective. The song was the icing on the cake. Rose, this is an amazing presentation. This one is going into my library! Lydi**

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shallimarRose

4 Years Ago

Thank you Lydi.. I am always surprised and honored when someone shelves my work. xo Rose
The song holds no meaning for me but the poem is quite excellent. Even if one cannot relate directly to this, which hopefully most people cant, I think everyone can appreciate this because deep inside us we always have that fear of losing a loved one.

I think you could write a matching poem for this from the boy's perspective too. I think one of the most feared aspects of death is leaving our loved ones behind and not being there for them. Well done all in all.

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shallimarRose

4 Years Ago

Thank you for reading Val. I think your vision of two poems from the boys/mans perspective is a goo.. read more
a small embrace
hand in hand he led her down
where he gave it to her
right there in front of her parents
a small silver locket
it was tied onto her corsage
"I LOVE YOU”

these lines are so beautiful and it gives the pleasure of love.....as the 2nd part is read it gives the pleasure of pain.......so beautifully penned.
she never did marry
no one could compare
to the memory left
by that boy on the stair
sixty years to the day
since the locket he gave
and they placed today
beside her in her grave...
very amazing piece, I could see myself in the broken situation ..loved it :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

shallimarRose

4 Years Ago

Vani thanks for reading and for the nice review. shallimarRose
Wow, made me wanna cry a bit. So full of different emotions. A tale of an undying love even though one of them had passed long before her death. Great poem, and touching story!

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shallimarRose

4 Years Ago

Thank you Rainy... its a tear jerker for sure with that video.... xo
Two words...Simply amazing! Keep up the good work

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

shallimarRose

4 Years Ago

Thank you wolflover? I am pleased to see a new name stopping by to read. shallimarRose

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