Churning

Song inspired pic from Google Images

 

 

 

There’s a color in the rainbow

that I cannot quite recall

it’s colors drawn from everything

yet with no color at all

 

 Cumulus clouds softly gather

just like cotton candy dreams

hovering in uncertainty

perhaps life's not what it seems

 

It's reminding me of something

is it something I forgot

I cannot get a sense of it

was it something I had sought?

 

Within the windmills of the mind

lie the circles of a storm

is this something quite the norm?

 

Like a world winds of emotions

and sandcastles washed away

then once upon a time was new

was it forever yesterday?

 

 Kaleidoscope within my brain

mirrored imaged every side

bursting into vibrant colors

of the things I've tried to hide

 

forgotten  fragments blown away

silent sounds on muted breeze

yet in my head a tempo pounds

and it brings me to my knees

 

 like wind chimed echo's haunting me

 in minds hollow how they dwell

they are my thoughts of yesterday

I thought I knew them well

 

Tunnel vision spectrums

in blinded light no longer seize

deafening, these silent sounds

a polaroid frame freeze

 

Still they're churning in my brain

thoughts continually stir

my life's become a mystery

filled with memories that blur

 

 

© bj smith

aka shallimarRose

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

This song always boggled my mind.. Comments and critique welcome...thanx

Reviews

[wordwarrior]

Gorgeous poem Rose. I adore that amazing imagery and metaphors that you wove into this. Loved the Polaroid freeze frame! My favourite is the 8th verse about the wind chimes!
Stunning writing as always!

[shallimarRose]

See it works without the syllable count I think.. lol Ive been doing it this way for forty years why stop now.. lol Thank you for reading . Glad you enjoyed.. xo

[wordwarrior]

No don't stop now and yes it works a treat!!

[Antoñyo]

Wow...beautifully-written, it flows like...well you know, I muted the sound and still heard breezes!
so, as light as air with stormy words raining down brilliance! Another of your masterpieces, what else can I say? Oh I know: "Cha-ching!" LOL!

Thanks for sharing

[shallimarRose]

Ok you are getting to be one of my favorite reviewers.. you have such a fun personality and always a colorful review. Thanks Anton.. xo Rose

[Antoñyo]

Ha! Childhood damage...loose wires'n all. ;-)
But I appreciate the kind words.

[Michael G. Smith]

I feel that beauty that is masking something darker that we know is there because we sense it. We have the same last name maybe we are related?

[shallimarRose]

yes, us and the other gazillion Smiths.. Thank you for stopping by to read Michael?.. I appreciate that and Yes.. hidden memories.. xo Rose your name is not by any chance Michael Gordon? just curious..

[Michael G. Smith]

No, Gary. I'm from the Wisconsin, Illinois smith clan.

[shallimarRose]

YES might be.. Wisconsin... is the clan my husband is from..

[Michael G. Smith]

Milwaukee eastside?

[shallimarRose]

I would have to call his mom and we're not talking lol.. Ill find out some names.. you never know

[Rita L. Sev]

So many great images in this piece, Rose. Our minds are amazing coffers, though they have hidden corners...

[shallimarRose]

Thank you for dropping by Rita.. xo

[Lydia Shutter]

The images you painted were multicolored even though the print inspiring the words was in sepia tones. I was drawn into the image because of the windmill. Thoughts of yesterday can blur at times. Are we really remembering things as they happened or do we embellish as time goes by? You can't hide from yourself, can you? That song is a poignant beauty. Loved the entire package, Rose. Lydi**

[shallimarRose]

Thank you Lydi.. song always a fav. I appreciate you coming to read .. xo Rose

[B-poet]

Loved the imagery along with your poignant written eloquence. Great work Rose. A compelling read. :)

[shallimarRose]

Thanks hun for taking the time.. xo rose

[Robbie~xoxo~]

This took me to a dreamy reverie... a melancholic tone, yet tranquil in thought, as a warm breeze flows through my mind...

I want to stay and read this piece all day! lol
So relaxing and beautiful in the journey of your words, Rose.... ahhhhhh~xoxo~

[shallimarRose]

Thanks Robbie and this beautiful old song does not hurt either. Every time I come to read a comment I have to sit and listen.. xo Rose

[Robbie~xoxo~]

I know... I'm entranced... getting sleepy...and sleepier..... lol

I think it's time for a nap...thanks Rose. ;P

[shallimarRose]

So many great versions of this song but her voice is perfect I think.. Nite nite.. :)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

;)) **************

[richom]

You've written many phrases here that produce great imagery. My favorite is "forgotten fragments blow away with silent sounds on muted breeze." Beautiful writing..

[shallimarRose]

Thank you rich.. xo Rose

[Wildflower]

I really love your way with words.
they are so descriptive and help to show the feelings you feel.
kudos

[shallimarRose]

Thank you Wildflower.. I don't think I have got a kudos since myspace lol.. Glad you like the way I weave ink.. Rose

[Trace]

I can relate to this last verse:
Still they're churning in my brain
thoughts continually stir
my life's become a mystery
filled with memories that blur.

That pretty much says it all. enjoyed this poem. Trace

[shallimarRose]

Awww, thanks darlin'.. I really like when something I write is felt and relatable.. Rose