Voices

The Overwhelming Power Of Suggestion

 

"Voices"

 

              Voices

      Hundreds of little

      Voices

Whispering inside of me

                           Voices

                          Hiding in my eyes

                     Voices

Voices

            Thrumming in my ears

                         Voices

                            Voices

Stealing my dreams away

                                    Voices

Voices

                     Voices

Blasting away my will to live

Voices

                          Voices

Voices

                                  Voices               Voices

                                   Incessantly babbling in my mind

           Voices             Voices         Voices

Pushing, forcing me

                                     Voices             Voices

To the very brink of insanity

VoiCeS          vOICES               VOICES

            voices                     VoICEs                     voICEs               VoicES

VOicEs                vOiceS             VOICes                    vOiCes

                               Stand on the edge...

VoiCeS          vOICES               VOICES

            voices                     VoICEs                     voICEs               VoicES

VOicEs                vOiceS             VOICes                    vOiCes

                       Stare into oblivion...

VoiCeS          vOICES               VOICES

            voices                     VoICEs                     voICEs               VoicES

VOicEs                vOiceS             VOICes                    vOiCes

The face of guilt appears

VoiCeS          vOICES               VOICES

            voices                     VoICEs                     voICEs               VoicES

VOicEs                vOiceS             VOICes                    vOiCes

                           The voices become one

                                   VOICES

                             off the edge I dive

       into the blissful blackness

          of eternity

                                 Alone

In Silence........

Author's Note

This poem is meant to reflect upon the pressure of keeping everything that you hate about yourself or everything that you are ashamed about inside, and letting the guilt consume you. Does it accomplish that? What feelings do come across, if not that? Apologies for any spelling or grammer errors.
(and yes, I know the font changes a lot...)

Reviews

[Emil Straton]

The positioning of the word "voices" and the altering of the font at the end brings life to what you're trying to project through your work. My mind automatically triggered into a rhythm with the placement. It captivates and magnifies exactly what you are pointing at. Then again it struck a bit of a cord in me. I, and consequently many of my characters, have such personalities in their head, the little voices kind enough to not let you forget when you've made mistakes.

Portion: To the very brink of insanity (voices) Stand on the edge.... (voices) stare into oblivion (voices) the face of guilt appears. is a very powerful set of lines. The word "voices" turns into a chant in the background as I read it, the lines coming to the foreground and standing out. Like spoken words over a music background, if you've ever listened to that effect it's quite artful and at the same time spine-chilling.

I think you've touched all the right keys here. Magnificent piece of contemporary poetry. You used position, font, and repetition to paint quite a vivid picture in my mind. Deepest compliments and unrequited respect my friend!

~E.A. Straton

[Tai-San]

OMG~! I love how you wrote this! You are so awsome!

[Shapeshifter]

wow.....such an amazing piece! Being a musician, it gave me some new ideas for production and such. Beyond that, the way you utilized the left to right swing of paranoia is right on par. way to think big. B

[Becca]

To answer your question in your Author's Note... Oh Yes it does! This is a masterpiece. The way you built on the voices is brilliant. I saw no spelling errors. You rock!

[QuietPoet]

I like how you formatted this poem. Good thinking. And very powerful..

[Dan Bullock]

I've got no problem with font changes or sizes....good old contemporary poetry!

You realise that if you are talking about keeping things shames inside and what you hate about yourself are the same things? I mean it terms of: They fuel each other.

Pressures on yourself can be highly difficult to deal with, the way out is to deal with them though id I'm honest.

Fight them, use them, beat them. And good luck :)

[Akiabella]

I love the format, the way you positioned the words. I love how the Voices seem to get louder and gain strength as you get further into the poem. It reminds me of a schizophrenic's mind, how the voices kind of drown out reality. Nice job.

[justjenn_2u]

This poem is unlike I have ever seen in a GOOD way!!! I love the positioning of text which gives the poem depth to actually feel what you are saying. I am marking this as a favorite!

[Angel Bird]

Wow - this piece has definitely an enormous power. It is very well done, practically as if one could hear those voices ... Impressive write!!!

[Kimmee Jean]

it kind of looks like it should make something with the words...totally relateable...and totally loved by me ...100 rating!