Weight off my shoulders

 

I forgive you all of it and there’s nothing left to say

Wish you every happiness for every single day,

Won’t think or talk about you with any negativity,

Won’t hold on to any anger about the lies you told to me

Because I’m a better man for it and I can smile again,

The toughest of all journeys has put me amongst men

And I don’t find it hard anymore to watch what you have chosen

I’ve risen above the hurt, my emotions have been frozen.

I put you on a pedestal and that was not your fault

But still I never expected you to treat my wounds with salt.

Still even after all the empty hollow words you said to me

I know enough to understand we all need to be free.

Reviews

[Stephanie S]

sometimes it can be so hard to be the bigger person....such a lovely poem, the beautiful way it is told makes your moving on from all this shine.

[CDoh]

wow!! i love your rhyme scheme. i try to follow the same kind of rhythm you should check out some of my work and see for yourself. i have read 3 of your pieces and look forward to many more..

craig..

[D. Elizabeth]

I think I've found my kindred spirit of poets. You write with an ABA format. Much like I. I love all of your works I have read so far. I especially loved, "But still I never expected you to treat my wounds with salt.

Still even after all the empty hollow words you said to me

I know enough to understand we all need to be free."

I think you've found a Fan in me. much respect. You must take a peek at what I write. No pressure. a job well done. xo -D.E.

[Destiny]

Very mature.
Forgiveness.
Something I have yet to master.
This was very well written. I was afraid I'd run into the same cliches, but I didn't. It was an upbeat refreshing read. Thank you
♥Destiny♥

[Raef C. Boylan]

You've done a great job with this rhyme structure, and have turned some cliches around into originality by writing them in a fresh sounding way and applying them directly to the content rather than just flinging them into the poem without purpose.
It's an uplifting read because of the maturity evidenced here and the positive attitude used to face down the situation.

Overall, great work.
Thanks for posting it.

[O!]

I am so glad uve found the positive in all the negative...this is the best way of trying and actually 'living' again....and forgiving gives u the feeling of being free again....
gosh!...am so glad to have read this...seems like we're sailing the same boat.......and the winds are in our favour...thanks to our own wisdom.

xxx,
O!

[Jon]

Hehe yeah to be fair I haven't even read this back - just pasting in what i can find for now. But I appreciate it ;)

[Tai Chi Italy]

This sits like a sonnet but isn't quite there Jon! It is a great read from the heart of a real man. I love your honesty, you will be rewarded here on earth for it, I feel sure. Smiling at you, Tai