Times

It seems like beat poetry more than anything...

        

the times we've tried

the times we've loved

and the times we've lied

the times we've cared

and the times we've cried

the times we kept it all inside

the times we felt

the need to confide

tie times we've shared

and the times we've sighed

the times we've forgotten

and the times we realize

that the times we've smiled

at the times we've kept

hidden inside

were the times we wished

we all just died

Author's Note

it's written freestyle, so don't comment on the lack of capitalization :) please ^_^

Reviews

[Nicole]

I liked this. Actually I have read through most all of your writings and I have enjoyed them. You have a pretty idiosyncratic style which I appreciate and find appealing...kind of sweetly sad, honest...well, nevermind my adjectives. I like your stuff!

[Lydia]

I found it to be a little much. Times times times times times. I realize this is the theme of your piece, but maybe you could try switiching it around a bit. For example: the times we've tried/when we loved/when we cried. Then you get a little less repetitive and a little more interesting. Good job though, I liked the little twist.

[Jimmy Greenie]

Brilliant. A great poem that reminisces on so many things. But the bit at the end is a bit depressing though

[Drifter]

Not a bad poem at all. The flow is quite easy to follow and except for a typo or two, it is essentially flawless. It's funny how some of the seemingly simplest pieces are often the ones that speak to us. Life seems to be full of those moments when we say "remember the time when..." Good work.

D.