Leaving

I'm standing alone
Life moving, flowing, driving on by.
I can see it
Passing the windows of my world
My children growing
My marriage moulding
But me, I'm ebbing away
A tide pulled away from the solid ground
My world near the start
Those I care for near the end
Failing, crashing, dying
Sucking my soul, my essence
Empty, alone, watching
Breaths struggling, fingers clawing
Pleading, searching for a refuge from all
A body moving, acting, looking
Where am I?
Has death finally drawn my curtain?
My anchor slipping on dredge
My kite string frayed
This is me, losing my will.

Reviews

[YoungWriter.]

Very well written, truly like it (:

[Tate Morgan]

As we get older we see those around us pass away. It is a ever present reminder that we are only a speck of dust within infinity. Lets just make a few children smile before we die

[Inspiring Writer]

I liked this write, but i'm sad to hear that you're a very busy one and you've hardly got some time living your life as you want to. Every line's showed the depth of your soul, of your body, of your love, of your life and of course of your heart. This's written in a very equilibrium mood which means in cool or in warm mood as well. You were cool when you write about your freedom but you where hot, warm, in worry when you dropped the words about your busy life. I know it's been too hard to live the life in this crowded people's busy arena but get some time for you so that you could live your life as you want to because life's short and don't wait to do what you want to because it's too late. I liked this write from the heart and i felt this write too, it's a nice flow and an imaginary expressed in your kind words... In the few words you've expressed your feelings too mcuh in your poetic way. I liked your reality, your smoothness, your depth thinking about life as well as your love about/towards yourself. Great job, theme's great to think about life. Keep writing and making such kinda nice stuffs, you're a great writer and don't forget to live your life as you want to life in your own and in a sensible ways. Awesome job.

[Stammers]

Powerful parting line. I would say you got the judgement of this just right.

[Patient Poet (Yos)]

Powerful , simple to the point , I love when a poem deal with ths most hard feelings , like you did ,looking at your life passing by , with no fear ... brave writing I love it x