A Love

I yearn

 

A Love

 

Searching for love, not just any pleasure

The morning of needing, someone by my side

I long for those nights, for my heart to fill with warmth

Now that it’s empty,, I place it by the door

 

I would cherish these lovely walks, if I weren’t alone

Gazing at the stars, wishing one would fall

Never the less, off to sleep I go

Hoping for a knock, I leave the door unlock

 

They say dreams are just fairytales

And wishful thinking never comes true

Sleepless nights I lay awake, thinking of that girl

Door wide open, hoping she’ll come through

 

Out there on this moonless night

I scan the ocean, as far as I can see

Pull my anchor, pack my bags

I lock the door to make my dream come true

 

                        by   Mauricio Montoya

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

I decided to write something without rhyming,I would appreciate your input good or bad. Mauricio

Reviews

[emmajoy]

Don't think meter means that end of the line words have to rhyme, there just has to be a musical flow to your thoughts, your words .. and, in this poem you've succeeded wonderfully well.

The open door picture is so strong .. almost shouting 'I'm here for you, come to me ..' and hopefully by now or soon, the one you want has stepped into your life. Dreans do come true ..

[Valentine]

This is a really good write and expresses feelings so well. Valentine

[joe shmo]

beautiful I like the pink text also! Thanks for the comment on my poems :) God bless! Keep writing you will get to be a pro soon enough Good work!

[Monkeybananers]

This was really lovely. Im especially fond of the line "They say dreams are just fairytales And wishful thinking never comes true"

[Lovely Lady]

Well, my dear... you nailed it... good poem.
~♥~

[An Ordinary Woman]

Hello Mauricio. rhyming poetry is just a personal preference. My poetry hardly ever has rhyme. good meter is important though. I like your poem. You convey both meter and message. very nice!

[Taylor H.]

cute, adorable and fun. Great work

[YouoweYoupay]

Very cute

[Marie Harrison]

I loved it. It's filled with a stark beauty, a loving heart, and new beginning. What an exciting love poem. Just a wonderful expression of self-love. I enjoyed.

[KatiePie]

I like how even though it wasn't rhyming it still had a beautiful flow to it.
Great write
Cathrine