This is Me

With the looks of my momma and the wit of my daddy,

the arms of a worker and the legs of a lady.

My attitude could twist metal, but my lips could break hearts.

Like an anti-Christ cupid shooting poison-tipped darts.

I have a light and a dark side like a star constellation.

However I would never, change my reputation.

The body of a woman, but the mind of a child.

Sorry if I offend you, I’m just a teeny bit wild.

My light side however is a bit more graceful.

Skirts and the works, things momma finds tasteful.

But like the moon in the sky a new side will dawn,

one person, one touch, will turn me back on.

Back to the side of the wild-like child.

The side that rarely shows only once in a while.

Luring and stirring, drawn in like a spark,

temptation keeps drawing you into my dark.

                             ~Rae Stanton

Reviews

[Zoe Jay]

This is one of the best poems I have read of this type. The couplets work really well, playing off against each other, giving it a neat symmetric rhyme and shape which draws the reader in and also gives the poem a bouncy feel and a charm. The similes are direct, original, and colorful. There's great feel and energy to this poem, and a sense of directness and truth which is very appealing. It's also neatly written, nice structure, compact, polished. I particularly like the colorfulness and quirkiness of the first two lines, that draws the reader into the piece right away. The last two lines are equally as concise and effective - those couplets bracket the poem really well. The rhyme scheme is really well done, it gives the poem a really strong coherence, and it's well executed and not labored at all. I also like the way the two sides of your character are presented, and how the feel of the poem and the word choices mirrors those aspects you are presenting at the time. This is really good writing! :)

[paradise]

I think this poem is great it shows alot of personaloty unique

[Prairieauthor1]

excellent phrasing and imaging

[Silent Knight]

I like the rhyme scheme and the flow. Good read. I find it kinda weird that that picture looks sooooo much like a girl I know.