Hand in Hand

Love on the beach

Walking hand in hand along the beach

Water crashing down on sand covered shore

Foam forming on salt water peaks

As the sun gleams on swelling waves

But the beauty I see as I stroll along

Is the wisp of hair blown about

Around the face of my true love

As we play and stroll

Along the beach hand in hand

Reviews

[B. Boileau]

This piece invokes a beautiful vision. You words flow easily to one's mind of walking hand in hand in love...the beach.. a perfect moment.
bill

[Willard Wells]

Bill, thank you for visiting my words and your comments.

[africa]

Lovely indeed. You and your partner walking in the sand. Great picture too.

[Willard Wells]

Thank you so much for your time and review.

[Relic]

~A perfect setting is only part of a perfect feeling. You've created a place not only of sight and sounds but of feelings. Being with one we love no matter the setting is the reason for living at times. ~

[Willard Wells]

Without love, life is worthless and loses all purpose and meaning for me. Thanks for your time in reading and reviewing my work.

[Samuel Dickens]

Both the picture and your gentle words are sublime. All the time I spent around the sea, I never got to stroll down the beach with someone special, but I imagine it would be like this.

[Willard Wells]

To me with the correct love, it can be a beach or a city sidewalk. It is the love you are with that matters and not the location. Thanks for the review and kind words.

[ANTO]

The line -
"Foam forming on salt water peaks" is tremendous Will.
Pure and simply, this whole piece is gorgeous Will.
Thanks for sharing it with us.

[Willard Wells]

Well that little change to salt water peaks was in part thanks to our friend John who had me re-think some words. I appreciate your kind words and taking time to read my work.

[ANTO]

Thats cool my friend.

I know this is cliche but for me, my personal fav is seeing the surf as the white horses. I literally get entranced seeing them and then seeing them dissolve.
Your welcome Will.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Tis such a precious gift to have love in your possession. You set the scene well here added to by your photograph. A romantic walk indeed.

One small suggestion is to change two of the 'wave/waves' in the first four lines as it is used three times.

[Willard Wells]

Thank you John I appreciate your ideas and will review.

[Willard Wells]

Well John I reviewed it and was able to find acceptable modifications. Accept this way I have water twice in the first two stanza. No way around it there will be something with a "W" in there somewhere.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I guess you could refer to 'breakers' crashing and the 'sun gleams on the ocean swell'?

[Willard Wells]

I think I am done tinkering with it for now. I personally have not been as concerned about the excess words on occasion. It comes down to how it feels to me. Now on your first comment I was able to find a way that I did not feel I lost the flow and intent of the msg. I have got to shut up. Damn. Appreciate the help and if it ever feels right I will let you know to. LOL

[JayceeC]

This is great imagery Willard pretty much like everything about this poem. You set your stage beautifully and then eclipse the scenery by focusing on wisps of hair and the face of love. And tied it together in a tight grasp.

[Willard Wells]

Thank you JC. I thought I would have you on this one with just the picture. You seem to like them. Of course with all the water you have had down there lately, the appeal may be wearing thin. As always, greatly appreciate your time.

[JayceeC]

Always enjoy your photos. Hopefully we'll miss any heavy flooding.

[AaronFreitas]

A beautiful scene you describe my friend. Love the words, love the descriptions and one of the most beautiful and peaceful moments in life is walking down the beach hand in hand with your loved one. Good work :)

[Willard Wells]

This just kind of carries on with my ocean/beach theme. Thank you for reading and commenting. I also hope you find your peaceful place with the right love in your future.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you buddy... I hope so too :)

[mattavelli]

This is lovely, Willard. Great imagery and tone.my wife is afraid of the ocean. Guess its too big.

[Willard Wells]

Thank you Matt. Me taking her to the beach is like reading her my poetry. It's not really something she relate too the same as me. I expect it is a cultural to some degree. With the poetry it is also the language. While she speaks english and other languages some to nuances are lost. I often here after reading to her, "What you mean". Makes me smile.

[Perkele.7885]

You and that girl better get a room when your stroll is over or there may be an accident on I-5. And then, no more Haiku King!

[Willard Wells]

Thank you Raj for the kind words and yes a room may be needed. Appreciate the review.