I Am Star

A poem about the life of a forgotten child

I AM STAR

On a night in October a star was born but not meaning fame

 I mean by my name

 A child so innocent and not feeling pain thinking I’m different 

This not so fun game 

As I grow with age the world seems to change more responsibilities enrage me

A vent of anger I can't seem to tame

The house is more crowded only more to do it’s always the same

Just another person for me to take blame

Inside I may cry to release the tension
 but these tears I hide I dare not to mention

“Oh there’s our star looking for more attention”

The years slowly pass as I stay out of trouble friends break promises and lie

So I stay in my bubble

I trust one person they know who they are I trust no other

But they live so far

I am myself I don’t follow a trend
 I'm not a sheep to society 

I am my own friend

Who knows what this life holds for me in darkness I lay

The dark blanket of night except for one light a shooting star
which like my life soon burns away 

I'm here at the moment although I wish to never see another day

I cant wait to shoot like that star
will they notice as I will fade away

Author's Note

Please be totally honest with your criticisms I find all reviews constructive thank you for reading

Reviews

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

I really get this poem I see a lot of how I feel in it. Nicely done

[steph]

It deleted part of my review I think the line
A child so innocent and not feeling pain thinking I’m different
This not so fun game
is a little hard to follow, may I recommend:
A child so innocent and not feeling the pain I'm thinking
in this creul and heartless game.
just a thought, other than that one line, all tech's are great and I really enjoyed it

[{A}shley {B}lack @-;-]

Was something wrong with this line??

[steph]

"A child so innocent and not feeling pain thinking I’m different
This not so fun game"

[A]

I loved the way of description you manged for it to reach out, i could relate to this poem very much, well done.

[Rasteely]

I can relate to this poem a little, if I understand it correctly. Part of it is about a kid who when he acts out or has some kind of problem others just accuse him of being overly dramatic (which can be a very annoying thing I know). I like that the one friend this person seems to have lives so far away, I can definately relate to that because I dont' have many friends and it seems the few that I do have just keep moving further away.
My only criticism is the line "I trust one person they know who they are I trust no other" it was a little bit confusing. Maybe separate here "I trust one person they know who they are/ I trust no other". Or maybe you don't even need the "I trust no other". I dont' know it just didn't flow as well as the rest of it.

[morningstar]

THIS poem in particular i can relate to 100 percent. I really liked this one because I've always felt this way, and I can really relate to the part when you said 'i am myself I dont follow a trend, I'm not a sheep to society, I am my own friend'. I think this whole poem is awesome :D

[Dilan Gray]

I just love all your poems. They are fantastic and you write so well that the images come easily! I love the flow of this poem and how the emotions are easy to pick up on and feel. Great piece of work!

[shelbylugal]

I do think they'll notice as you fade away with poems like these. This poem was very well thought out and I loved your choice of words, it really added to the piece.

[Alexa Tasch]

I really liked this. It flowed smoothly and really tells alot about you. It was deep and emotional and i enjoyed reading it