Departing

Leaving on a train

Departing 

Peering out that window mirrored emotions stand

I don’t wish to leave you, placing my lonely hand

reflections of joy from my visit 

our new found love embraced

holding you for more than a second 

new feelings unlocked

Never to be replaced

I thought I could cope with the departure 

but as I begin to move

It hurts leaving part of me behind 

our laughter and comfort our love totally ensued 

I look upon your moving image

 before your out of view 

until next time  

when once again our love we can pursue 

Author's Note

I wrote this on the train after visiting my ex

please be honest as always

Reviews

[Shelby]

Sad. That opening line was fantastic. "Peering out that window mirrored emotions stand" That sounds so beautiful, with that pang of the lonely looking out at the world. Right off the bat, the reader knows there's going to be something sad put before them.Also, the ending has that feeling that it's not the end, that the story will continue on after the poem ends, leaving the rest to the readers imagination. And the fact that the story hasn't ended leaves us with a note of hope, feeling that it isn't over, we can find happiness soon, even if now isn't going the way we want it to. You capture that sorrow and hope so beautifully, and that little note at the end, about you writing this on a train about an ex is just so poetic. Be comforted in the fact that I imagined some old time-y poet, Edgar Allen Poe or someone ssimilar, writing this. So already you've got that image, in my mind at least. Very lovely poem and thank youfor sharing this with me.

[J. R.]

Opening line was great. Your work is as emotional and honest as ever.

[howlfjdks]

Not knowing if you will see them again, I enjoy love with another person but it is so difficult to let them go. They are a part of you, yet, they are seperate. Soft touch in words.

[Alvin L. Kathembe]

i can so relate...that moment, when you stare at the retreating figure, which turns to wave, and smile, and maybe blow one last kiss before it disappears...
sigh

[trainwreck]

"I thought I could cope with the departure." I can't count the number of times I've felt that way. Great job.

[Tarik]

relinquishing loved ones is so difficult. But somewhat, we start a new life and we make more friend and more people that give us hope and show us that we can still live for someone else.

[A]

Wonderful capture, you expressed your feelings in a way that would reach out to everyone who read this!
The imagery is simply outstanding,
I like this very much Ashley, well-done.

[Rose Masen]

Man, you really captured that moment so perfectly. I felt everything through this piece. The imagery in this was unreal. So sad, yet so reassuring, and full of strength. Nice job, love.

[Midday_Mystery]

Bittersweet and so longing. Very nice

[HopelesslyDevoted]

sad, but gorgeous in style and flow