Aimee

A poem requested by a work friend

Aimee

Strict rules apply to earn this love
Her angelic perfection
Sent from above

Past mistakes make her weary
Why not try once more?
My only query 

This woman eludes me
A shadow I give chase
But at the end there is no finish line
To her I’m not even in the race

Her smile releases my heart
Her touch makes me weak
Her laugh is so contagious
But my chances remain bleak

For we work together
A rule I must abide
Don’t date within work
My feelings I have to hide

She recognises my talent 
Always has positive things to say
But I question if I’m even her type
I can’t be end of the day

I can give you all my heart
But that’s not what you pursue
I’m best of disappearing
Hidden from your view

You have a thirst for life
A wild side I adore
I can give you the world
But I fear you crave more

So live your life and be happy
But for you my love is eternal
I need no sleep for you are my dream
Leaving this poet nocturnal

Author's Note

A poem for my dear friend who supports my writing thanks hun

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Reviews

[freelancejouster]

i really like this, the message behind it and the flow through the whole thing. it's so sickly sweet, and here, that's wonderful.

third stanza is great. the last line of stanza six is kind of... it doesn't quite make sense to me, i don't know if i'm just missing a beat because of lack of punctuation or if you're missing a word. stanza seven: do you mean "best off?" i love the eighth stanza. "but i fear you crave more" is just brilliant.

*cough* punctuation? *cough cough*

[trainwreck]

"I could give you the world,
But I fear you crave more."

Your works are always excellent. I mean this, I am always happy to see something from you in my read requests. Great job on this!

[hedgehog]

love it

[absolutefolie]

I loved how the pronouns changed halfway through, which kept us guessing. Nice write

[Hello, Goodbye]

great work man, as usual.. keep it up bro..

This is beautiful, I love it. It is great that you have a close personal friend supporting you and I think that you writing this pome for them is great.

[Jed]

I enjoyed this poem very well written good flow great imagery overall very good job

[Jonathan]

F*****g solid is really all I have to say

You have a thirst for life
A wild side I adore
I can give you the world
But I fear you crave more

That right their is depressing
but its a beautiful way of describing it
Well f*****g done

[Alvin L. Kathembe]

great descriptions!
"This woman eludes me
A shadow I give chase
But at the end there is no finish line
To her I’m not even in the race"

and

"I can give you the world
But I fear you crave more"

reminds me of...sigh :(

[Murtuza]

Lovely descriptions used here, I love this poem :)

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

I liked this a lot good flow and imagery Sad but I could still feel the hope in it. Unrequited Love is there anything worse... I think not

100/100