Fireflies

An "I am" poem. I was just experimenting with the format, really.

I am lost amongst fireflies.
I wonder if they know
I hear their wings beating in the still air and
I see the technicolor dreams flitting on their wings and
I want nothing more than to grasp one and hold it and know it’s mine.
I am lost amongst fireflies.

I pretend that I understand when
I feel the brush of a shadow at the tips of my fingers.
I touch the darkness and it sings to me and
I worry that I have gone mad but I remember that it no longer matters.
I cry still, when the voices fade, and mourn that
I am lost amongst fireflies.

I understand
I say too many things I don’t really mean, but still,
I dream of a silent world strangled in the blackness and even as
I try to remember what I called myself before,
I hope to find the truth, but
I am lost amongst fireflies.

Author's Note

Any sort of review would be really nice. Thanks. ^^

Reviews

[loowzerX]

:)

[nono]

I love it! I remember going outside at night to catch fireflies! Oh how I miss days like that i wanna be 3 again!!!! Haha nice job though this poem is beautiful and I love the description!!!

[NinjaPi]

amazing poem. so sweet.

[LilyM;)]

This is really beautiful... I'm goingto write it down I love it so much! You create so much feeling and mystery in just a few words... I love the whole idea conveyed by this poem even tho I dnt completely understand it:) awesome job and keep writing!!!!!

[Emily B]

we are all a little lost among the small light . . . it is good of you to sing it so sweetly

[ebur™]

This is a great poem, really captivating, with good imagery and use of words. I though it was great how you emphasized that line 'I am lost amongst fireflies'. This also flows very well, and I felt "magical" :D while reading this. Great job :)

[Cherie Paregrine Isis]

Aw this is really good!And it reminds me of fireflies by owl city!Well the first verse totally does!it really flows well,word to word.

[Bella-Marie]

How do you manage to weave such a divine magic into your words??? This piece is so gorgeous, I can't describe how I felt. There is an awesome song by a band called "Owl City" called Fireflies, you should hear it (unless you already have)

[John A Common]

I dig it. The style is cool and the flow is very well done. Great job.

[Ron Hogan]

I like it. I'm not familiar with this "format." Where did you come across it? It seems pretty fun, something I might like to try. I see that it uses line repetition, similar to a villanelle. Which, by the way, you executed splendidly.