"It's Just A Blip!"

"It's Just A Blip!"

A Poem by Ron
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Triple Heart Bypass

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This is a previous version of "It's Just A Blip!".



They told me it is "Just a blip!"

My leggy veins out 'cut and snip.'

Relaid to pass my heart and "Clip!"

There, into place, fresh blood to ship.

 

Through valves and into ventricles,

Flowing without obstacles.

 

I'm feeling ill but "it's just a blip!"

(Please keep me in life's membership!

I have deeds to do and wrongs to fix.

Before this human form I quit.) 

© 2011 Ron


Author's Note

Ron
A tribute to a dear lady.



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Excellent tribute! Has a slight sense of humor to it.
Very entertaining poem!

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Great rhyme and great tribute. Plus it catches the emotions making you smile, laugh and get just that twinge of waiting for the future.
Spot on mate.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Love the play on words along with the rhythm and rhyme great stuff my friend.
excellent write.



Posted 12 Years Ago


clever rhyme and smooth flow

Posted 13 Years Ago


surgery, no matter how much the doctors try to dumb it down, or make it look like nothing, is always scary. this seems to show the nervouseness she must have been feeling. and you characterized it as if you were sitting there jokeing with her :) :) good write my freind, very nice rhyme, very popish

Posted 13 Years Ago


Great tribute, I've know people who has had bypass surgery and can relate to your poem!

Posted 13 Years Ago


Ah yes, tributes...that Prich aint no flatliner. Cunning use of blipping rhyme.
Poem entire is held together by a central couplet flowing with blood. This is DNA
or the poetry of DNA. This is red and white corpuscular convalesence. This is quite frankly about getting better. Just like the author. His rubber gloves stained with the plasma of poetry. Viva! Viva! Viva!

Posted 13 Years Ago


I hope it went that easily for her and that the results will be very long-lasting. I've had bypass surgery twice and can tell you that it does work. (I miss that vein in my leg, though.)

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 13 Years Ago



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