HELLEN

To the love of my life

Half a beat i skipped.
Experienced heaven on earth.
Lovely lady crossed my path.
Lunch hour it was, i approached you.
Exuberant and so full of life.
Never will i be the same without you.

Incandescent my heart is,

Like One Volcanic Eruption.

Yearning to have you in my arms.
Overwhelming emotions.
Understand my weaknesses and be my strength.

Author's Note

feedback would be appreciated and while you are at it dont forget to rate it

Reviews

[Gerry Legister]

Passionate first meeting with a glimpse of romance coming with overwhelming emotions and weakness crossing into an exuberant state of mind

[3X3MPLER]

thank you sir

[bhavya]

Love this one. Passionate it is.

[Carbon Muse]

Nice acrostic ;D

That first glimpse ... that moment ones eyes meet for the first time ... there's nothing like it.

[Celie Rose]

I liked your poem. "Like One Volcanic Eruption. Overwhelming emotions." Expressed well.
Good job. Keep writing

[Kieran Shuttleworth]

Excellent choice of words for describing love, infatuation and dizzying joy. "Like One Volcanic Eruption" is my favourite line, great imagery for that tidal wave of emotions, I couldn't have described it better myself. Keep up the good work!

[3X3MPLER]

thank you.i dont know if you noticed , all the capital letters in that poem make a hidden sentence. Try figure out the sentence

[Blu]

This is an interesting depiction of infactuation. It evokes thoughts of teenage puppy love. Then again, it makes me think about a long distance romance. Either way, it is a good poem. Keep it going, you have a real flare.

[3X3MPLER]

thank you for the motivation

[Autumn Lyric]

Lovely thoughts conveyed here...I really enjoyed reading how this special lady has captured your heart and how you captured the moment(s) in verse! there is so much joy felt in the words. I particularly enjoyed the final line, beautifully done!...Thank you for sharing...

[3X3MPLER]

your feedback is highly appreciated

[Autumn Lyric]

AH.. I see the form you selected, a surprisingly nice touch ... excellent work!

[Willard Wells]

Nicely done and hopefully you can move beyond the lunch to true love. New love is one of the best.

[3X3MPLER]

thank you very much sir

[A.marie.speaks]

Short and sweet. I liked this a lot. The last lines are my favorite

[3X3MPLER]

am glad you like it.thank you

[B. Boileau]

Your words speak volumes. Insightful piece into the inlarged heart in devotion of the "lovely lady crossed my path" ( I always liked titles with actual names too ). Excellent, emotional piece my friend.
bill

[3X3MPLER]

thank you very much for stopping by