Uncle Bun

Written for a time-pass...........

I have a friend, His name is Uncle Bun

He loves The Big Mac hamburger and Bun

He was from Never-land, place of Peter Pan

He always travel in his own Van 

 

His favorite restaurant is McDonald’s

While his best character was Duck Donald,

Because he love President Donald.

His favorite actor is Sutherland Donald

 

I love my friend from Never-Land

Linkin park is my favorite band

I don’t like to demand

I heard Lost boys story firsthand.

Reviews

[Taniska 😊€..]

I like it , because the rhyming scheme is just amazing keep writing( smiles) 😊😊😊

[Donna]

I do enjoy rhyming poems, this one is very good. Nice job!

[mou]

oh it's so funny..a light humorous one with very interesting and funny words to maintain the sweet flow..enjoy it ..also my first review on your page probably..Great!

[Abraham George]

it's not my best . Better read other poem or story to evaluate me. Thanks for stopinng by and commenting

[mou]

I did not read writes to evaluate others,,as I don't place myself at that place but just love to read..yes sure I will do..and please visit my page as per your time :)

[Abraham George]

i will give a visit dear.

[Chase Dylan]

*Welcome to "Pure Rhymes" Thanks for joining, great to have you...!*

Lmao... This was just plain great... The references... The wordplay... Smashing...

[Evelyn Ohiomoje]

I am fascinated by the rhyme. I also understand that you are talking about uncle bun, yet I don't feel the last verse connected

[Norah]

I think the lines above would sound great as a song. Nice use of words; simple and short. I wasn't able to see what you were trying to convey :(
Keep it up xx

[AcasualPawn]

Nice flow of words...............
Perfect rhyme...........

[barleygirl]

This is an interesting flow of ideas that are loosely connected by the related words thru-out. I like the loosely structured names & rhymes, but I have to tell ya, I don't like anyone who likes Trump, so that's not such a good line. Maybe something a little less simple-minded, such as: "he's baffled by President Trump" which would be a nice way to say the truth of our situation here. Very few people love this very bad president. So think about this line, OK? Thanks!

[Abraham George]

i think you didn't understand the meaning.

While his best character was Duck Donald,
Because he love President Donald.

i just compare him with Donald Duck a comedian.

[Abraham George]

nothing more there.

[Gee]

Rhyming for rhyming sake often leaves me non the wiser after reading. I have seen awesome and brilliant written in other reviews, perhaps I am missing something

[Priyanshi]

rhyming words are brilliant, and very finely written.

[Abraham George]

thanks for the visit and comments

[Priyanshi]

my pleasure.