King of Flawed Reason

Festering molestation of achin'...

I'm separated by my own demons, my own feelings leapt alive with meanin'...

I'm crowning myself king of flawed reason...

For the reason I stand alone most the time...

Is I'm not feeling very grown at the time...

Like a seed with no warmth, a man outta lines, my rhymes are not good enough...

I stow it under and keep grumblin', actin' tough, mining away and wondering if it will ever be true...

Will I follow a shining path or break hollow and used...

Blasted by traces of iced gas, leaving me numb and bruised...

A rats uncle I'm stuffy and masked, you are sultry and out of grasp...

So I gasp and raise myself above the bar, I raise my own bar...

The imperfection flawed is tar that stops and harms...

Will I garner enough force to engulf mars...

Or will I fall hard and overwhelmed...

Just scars...

Author's Note

Sometimes depression is crippling... Hope everyone reading this remembers they are not alone in the fight... Keep living day-to-day, and know you are valued... Have a good one

Reviews

[Vasilees Sybissyl]

This is so abstract, and so beautiful, just as always. I specially love the lines,

"The imperfection flawed is tar that stops and harms...
Will I garner enough force to engulf mars...
Or will I fall hard and overwhelmed...
Just scars..."

Just so beautiful.

Love,
Vasilees

[Chase Dylan]

As always, a beautiful review, Vasilees, thank you, and am glad you enjoyed

[Ken Simm.]

This is it exactly. The black dog to a T. Or at least for me. I can really empathise with this. We both know that depression is not just feeling down or being in a bad mood. It is a crippling condition that ruins lives. I feel I must thankyou for this Robert.

[Chase Dylan]

Thank you very much, Ken, I appreciate the time spent conveying relatability to what I have written...
It feels like a choice to those on one side of the looking glass, a mandate for the other side.
Neither side understanding each other.

[Robert Trakofler]

Did you just type out the silhouette pattern for one of those space invaders creatures from the 1978 console video game and inadvertently discover the theory of everything? OOOOOOOOOOOOOH never mind i just needed to clean my glasses. Chances are you did fall again cause just when you thought you have reached your absolute zero toleration space left... you fall! Land flat on your face release a gigantic mind fart literally the gas is expelled from the mind and out of your nose and ears leaving you no chance to avoid the stench whatsoever! Gives you just a... terribly, annoying headache too. But low and beholding the cycle begins afresh:) P.S. I have been told if you ingest a decent quantity of Sen Sen before said miasma release occurs you can alleviate some of the noxious.

[Chase Dylan]

4 years too late, but upon reading this...
I can not say it was not worth the wait...
Astounding POV, and way with words, Robert.
I hope you are alive and well.
A most sincere thank you, for both having the greatest exposition possible on my works, and for being an astounding writer/human being.

[Robert Trakofler]

I wrote this before i died the first time glad to see your still here ish

[Chase Dylan]

Then I re-read it the second time I was reincarnated, gotta say, not impressed...
Hah, glad to see you are also still about-ish.
Unless you actually died and came back, then my joke feels in bad form, but bad form yields terrible results so I am sticking to it...

[R.J Calzonetti (Siniste..]

I think your excellent rhymes are more than enough of a reason not to doubt yourself. As for depression, and not feeling good enough, I understand the feeling. If I can’t write, I feel useless. I’m really depressed, and haven’t seen friends in months. I only leave the house to exercise. And when I can’t write I feel worthless. I’ve gotten so hungry for it that I’ve pushed back collabs because I feel the need to be solitary.

But look at all the people here. You inspired them. Me and several hundred others. Isn’t that a success story?

[Chase Dylan]

I appreciate it, R.J...
It is 4 years late but I appreciate the time and encouragement offered.
I am glad to hear I provided inspiration.
I would consider it a success, yes

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Indeed depression is like caving. The deeper you go the narrower it gets. You have captured those feelings in a 'rap' of a poetic offering filled with salutary meaning.

[Chase Dylan]

Thanks so much, John
Avoid the cave walls, that is all, aha

[Chris Shaw]

I think you are perfect at wearing the crown of flawed reason. Depression plays on our insecurities and can reduce us from being a lion to a mouse. It can do it quickly as well. All those bloomin negatives can play havoc. You can go down hill fast, but it takes alot longer to climb back up. That's where your lines took me Silente.

Chris

[Chase Dylan]

D'aw.... Tank'z, Chris...
I enjoyed where my lines took you more than I enjoy my lines at this point...!
A crown in the shape of one size fits all...
So be careful you do not get it plonked on your head!
It looks nice to wear, but I assure you...
It is HEAVY

[Chris Shaw]

Never been fond of the limelight. You can keep the crown and the jewels. They ain't me :)

[Chase Dylan]

IKR... But, you see... The crown chooses the owner... Not I...

[gram linski]

King of flawed reason was perfect in it's imperfection, your rhymes are banging, great poem

[Chase Dylan]

Thanks so much, Gram
Bang up insight, imperfect within perfection within... Etc... Good eye!

[Do]

a great write!! everyone is imperfectly perfect and flawlessly flawed.

[Chase Dylan]

Thanks so much! Sorry it has taken a minute to reply! Been away for a while. So true, my friend

[Richard McLin]

Again you show why you are a poetry badass. This is a great piece, words you don't always see in poetry are not only used here, but you can't imagine the piece without them. Great job on another fine piece.
-Richard

[Chase Dylan]

Thanks so much! Sorry it has taken a minute to reply! Been away for a while. I love your compliments... Lol

[AKhaus]

excellent flow, word choices and expression...I really enjoyed this read.

[Chase Dylan]

Thanks so much! Sorry it has taken a minute to reply! Been away for a while.