Dysfunction

Living between selves

Fixed.

in pieces

Fixed.

in pieces

 

living

 

Watching from outside myself

how all that I am disappears

behind a curtain of absurd

 

I become empty

dropping the answers

revealing my emotions

and

 

myself

to death.

 

Letting hope convince me

of idiotic

dreams inside my mind

 

taking one step closer to a back hole called

madness.

 

I crawl...

 

Reviews

[Dani California]

haha! Unfortunately, I relate to this more than I care to admit. The descent from hope to hopeless is brilliantly portrayed, and though I would much rather acknowledge the opposite direction, sometimes this is how it goes..

Get up, dust off... and keep moving is the only way to truly evade the madness, or at least appear to have evaded the madness that is. ;)

I enjoyed this... outstanding work!

[1809 Black Plague Decem..]

its hard, the images I get, great write, ---mishel

[Seriana]

Oh how I live here perpetually!!
"Letting hope convince me
of idiotic
dreams inside my mind "
I love this, and the title is absolute perfection for the topic. Short, to the point, and right on. :) Nicely done!

[Annalisa]

I found this east to relate to, though it's really really choppy and for me at least was a little hard to get through. I think there may also be a typo, when you said "to a back hole" did you mean black hole?

[DiamondNRough AKA Patty..]

Me too...Easy to relate. Good Writing!

[Kris Tate]

This makes me really see in myself that which I don't want to see. Great write. This was what I was looking for in the falling apart contest.

[D. Nelson]

wow this is amazing, it speaks deeply about our own self deceit (or at least thats what i gathered) this is a great piece of writing

[dilettante1890]

I have felt this way too--like I put too much of myself out there sometimes. I like this raw, and unusual. Nice job

[Crazy Cat Man]

haha this is the prequel to my poem "Pretty and Damaged" just kidding..... a great piece you capture the despair of the unknown.

[Angelic Darkness]

I believe we all are dysfunctional living in this mad world...AD